Hip Hop Forum

so you probly heard im gaining respect, im the new rap king elect/
im spittin game on you, reject, i spit rhymes the crowd can detect/
sure that's all pretty great, but what's it matter when people only hate/
no one knows how to appreciate, and dying alone seems to be your fate/
all you need to do is keep on the fight, until your life becomes bright/
i know right now your alone at night, but soon you'll be in that spotlight/
your down to sell records but not your soul, cuz without it, you just wouldnt be whole/
forget money, you've just got dirty old coal, soon you'll be rich, playin on the latest game console/
you wanna find true love and that's it, you wanna feel like a king when you spit/
you wanna be a hood figga all legit, your gonna be the best and no you just won't quit/
soon in the money you'll be divin, the rap champ just barely survivin/
cuz your fame is how the haters be thrivin, but to be the best is just why your strivin/
your determined to be on top, to be the best and you just won't stop/
you'll let the haters roll in their slop, Screw em' all, your angry, call a cop./
now your the best, you didnt make time for rest/
now your a walkin-talkin anger fest, your blastin through their bullet proof vest/
your gettin more hatin than appreciation, your frustrated theres no way it can be illustrated/
your concentrated, and actively motivated, your the best in the game, the rest are just bein scorched by your flame./

yo dude for real you have some simple simple simple ass rhymes try and use multis man u NEED them... you know wat multis are???
when more sylabuls line up man try them and try using more wordplay and even some metaphors man if you have questions on this just ask people will help you if you don't act cocky