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Tell me you won't get caught
In the cross-fire.
When my chest
Bursts like a million reflections,
I want you to see yourself the way
My heart perceives you.

There’s an Earthquake that travels
From my toes to my chest.
It keeps me in line,
Right now it’s trembling.

Right now.
You’re walking the fault
Line of my mind,
Reminding me of why I broke
So hard the first
Time you settled in.

Keep me whole I can’t help
But to Think I’m falling.
If I forget to tell you you’re bright,
Forgive me. . .

Sometimes I forget people are stars.

-- Mon Nov 30, 2009 11:31 am --

This was really good. Great imagery and choice of words. Liked the metaphors as well. You're a nasty poet, man, keep it up.

Ewww....

Tell me you won't get caught
In the cross-fire.
When my chest
Bursts like a million reflections,
I want you to see yourself the way
My heart perceives you.

That Was.. ILL
Keep It Up I See You

Phenominal, of course. Could have been longer, but that's just my opinion haha.

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Thanks for the feed ya'll

Word this was a lil more abstract than ive read in a while... but the lil part creative quoted caught my attention...had to read it like 3 times lol... It seems u guys up in here go it locked down... Im inspired... For real...Looking foward to more drops from u dude

Good stuff as always you really bring emotion to your poems and can describe the shit out of simple things.

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here’s an Earthquake that travels
From my toes to my chest.
It keeps me in line,
Right now it’s trembling.

Right now.
You’re walking the fault
Line of my mind, ........


U know why i think you are dope...everytime you write some shit i think you are in trouble lol. naw on the real you be on some Erykah badu, Mos def poetry type shit. and as usual a good read.