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Steadily runnin outta space,
wannabe gangsters in my face,
Emcee from a third world race,
emcee is wild and out placed.
little niggahs preaching fate?
my true respect for rap abates,
niggahs should stop pointless debates.
rap long runnin in first place
at constant exponential rates
rap now at it's hottest to date,
now rap is close to dead a state...

"yo repect me OR I KILL YOU"(quote)
nah niggah i dont feel you,
gotta show me the real you
im strugglin for a meal too
my oppertunities are few too.
but theres no niggah i kneel to
read this, and let it heal you
it's what Mandela went through

he forgave and forgot like he had no clue,
of years of third world prison blues.
The choice is yours, you just gatta choose.
live a lie, and forget your truths.
live in truth and maintain ya fruits
dont pick your friends in groups.
cause you might lose your youth.
someone always has drama worse than you.

-so i tell myself-(spoken line)

man all i got to say is dam ur lines are short... to me this read a lot like a poem definitly becuz u rhymed the same words a couple times.... and it seemed like you typed this fast cuz a couple lines it seemed like you left out a word but good work keep em coming

thanks for the feed.
ima write one for you containin only the word NyaggaH.

peace.

Best Written ive Seen From u Yet Man, Props. Lines Were Short But Flow Was Steady The Whole Way Through, in Fact The Short Lines Benefitted The Style in Which it Was Written. 1st Verse Didn't Stand Out as Much as The 2nd And 3rd To Me, But it Was Good For introducing What u Had To Say. Good Perspectives Shown Too, u Had ur Own And Contradicting Ones Which is an Awesome Technique When u Write Drops Like These, i Use it a Lot.

Only Complaints is u Kinda Skimmed Through Some Of The Topics Without Touching Base, But That Might've Been The Style u intended. Still Gtta Give Credit Where it's Due ur Really Fitting into ur Style.

Thanks dude I apreciatte(?) it alot, and I'm glad you think i'm improving.

As for MOE, Niggah stop hatin. on every drop you got only bad shit to say. I aint even reading your wack as feed no more man, I'm over it.

Peace.