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Audio version is on myspace....


born nineteen eigthy three, its crazy see
my pops seen my face and just knew that he made a G
see my mom's was a white girl...
and it just so happen he was moving that white girl
no boyfriend and girlfriend, she was just a girl friend
and his son pack flames to make the world end
see, he was stash'n bricks in the closest
when he paid for her college, he was keep'n on his promise....
i was born then he switched his methods
to raise his, kid with ethics, and i get the message
from the same thing he made a name in
it's insane if we could trade i do the same so i can't blame him
i mean...who would want a kid to meddle in the drugs
cuz he tried to forget that it was embedded in my blood
i could see him now my doorway, tryna creep inside
watching me sleep, knowing it's beast inside, c'mon man listen..

~hooks plays..


turned twenty, broked the rules of my poppa
tucking tools, ducking school, nothing move but the product
making moves by the locker, for a few of them dollas
didn't matter me to me i needed food for my pockets
yeah them dudes tried to knock us, but i knew they were coppas
that's why i stayed wit the tools when them fools try to rob us
see i grew from the bottom, tryna live as father
and now im out to realize my dreams....
...but until then my nigga im devising schemes
I can see you up heaven im repping the name right
stop by, pour some henney on ya grave site

I think you have the potential to be a great story teller extend your vocabulary more and make sure you stay on topic use proped english unless ur swagging bars out n ur feeling wavy ya dig

For some reason this reminded me of Lloyd Banks. Had some subtle but simple multies to make it smooth. Flow fell in a few spots IMO but it was pretty solid. Like K said, boost yer vocab and keep working with that imagery and you'll be a hell of a writer.

Yeah ill shit indead. You got alot left there for us to see.

nice drop.

"i was born then he switched his methods
to raise his, kid with ethics, and i get the message
from the same thing he made a name in
it's insane if we could trade i do the same so i can't blame him"

my favourite bit

i appreciate the feed...i normally don't write rhyme like this if you heard any of my audios u'll see my lyrical style is on a whole another level i just felt like telling some kind of story nevertheless i appreciate all feed whether postive or negative...so good looks