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Ever been to the point where you contemplate suicide
Ever been to the point where shit just aint fine?
Every month cold as december
It's like your chest is tender
No defence to be rederred
like your life was-just
pretending-sending-denting emotion-motion unrelenting-pending resenting-venting on yourself
noting on the shelf
alone in bad health
bereft of wealth
dying in stealth
like you in a state of non-compliance
something like diplomatic defiance
pain and violence like overbearing giants
slain in silence by undercaring tyrants
raining the rhyming like you crying
writing the rhyming like you dont have time an' you close to dying an' jesus just aint replying
gun in the mouth...method decided
like the soul just took to hiding
no white light shining
the darkness defining
and fuck the timing it aint like i'm signing
where do you begin, when it's it-it's it, get the dipstick and let it sing...


Shit happens.

damn homie, this is way more like spoken word than a rap. but dope none the less. poetry is allways good.. nice venting session man...

peace

thanks for the feed man. I apprecciate it.

looking good man, got some good rhymes there, pretty deep with some sick metaphors and I like the way a lot of it flows. Good job

Peace

Nice Drop....

Im Feelin Those Multi's man.....

yea i agree definitely a peice meant for a open mic or spoken word but neverthless well structured and the lyrics was deep in their use

Thanks for the feed guys, You're helpin me develop.
fo sho.