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Closer To Home

Posted: Mon Jun 22, 2009 7:17 pm
by Omega Bill
Everything you see is a fallacy, a false truth of sorts like a mirage
Is what u tell urself when u c ya mom hangin from a booth in my garage
I didnt want this to happen to you, but sometimes you got hit closer to home
I just decided to catch her nappin too, then over-dose her while shes alone
Now shes gone, you can catch your dad in the freezer and ur sis is in the oven
I left ur lil brother bludgeoned, cut off his fingers then mailed em to your cousin
Dont sit there and pretend its fake, look up ur best friend and hit send
But her voicemail picks up and its me laughing and cracking while her chest bends
This is just a lesson you never learned, you play with fire youre gonna get burned
And itd be funny if it was a fable, but dire now that the tables have turned
Im in a stable in your backyard, seein u cry not thinkin Id go this far over a liar
And you can leave nowm but theres something stinkin by your car in the tire
It looks like matted hair, and in your driveway is ur boyfriends corpse thats on fire
Now I make my move, a swift jack with a pick axe to the back nd drag u to the sacks
Blood is something you dont lack, as I impale you on a rack covered in thumb tacks
Such a pretty site to see, petty is what your lifes to me, I told you were meant to be
But love cant be sent to me, so I paint a heart in blood, n leave with the intent to be free
And if that plan falls flat, Ill be back, opening the door with the keys you lent to me

Re: Closer To Home

Posted: Mon Jun 22, 2009 11:24 pm
by K KiLLaH
LoL Ur crazy killin ur gf friends and family before you kill her lol this has serious potential to be something great it was well written was adjust to fix flow and even ur rhymescheme bars..example

Such a pretty site to see, petty is what your lifes to me, I told you were meant to be/
But love cant be sent to me, so I paint a heart in blood, n leave with the intent to be free/
And if that plan falls flat, Ill be back, opening the door with the keys you lent to me/


thats a 3 line rhymescheme when ur writing ur end rhymes think bars not lines

Re: Closer To Home

Posted: Tue Jun 23, 2009 4:52 am
by -MenaCe-
^^exactly good point killah,

But for the most part im feelin this nice drop the whole concept is sick, good shyt

Re: Closer To Home

Posted: Thu Jun 25, 2009 10:26 am
by ReCkinAll
Nice Drop....