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I'm not a preacher but let my try for a second/
What's with all these people that have to lie for acceptance/
Do they thrive for attention or feel their way through the dark/
Not bright enough to see they really hate who they are/
Like I've said, people are so obsessed with thier image/
That they neglect and forget all the perfection within us/
Afraid of rejection so they think they need to shapeshift/
Make it up as they go, but the real them is being wasted/
Some day they'll learn as they wait for their turn/
For their dreams to come true, convinced its the way that its earned/
Gaze out to sea at all they're wanting to reach/
While I'm boarding my raft and pushing off of the beach/
Built with my dreams, it may appear as an ailment/
But my hope floats and I've got the perserverance to sail it/
Good things come if you wait, but I know a secret/
The greater things in life come to those that seek it/

Thanks for listening.

Nice...

More poetic when it comes to the flow. Some lines have more meaning than others as some have more delivery, it balances out.
You're one talented fuck. Keep it up.

8/10

Couldn't Agree More with The Content, Especially The Last Bar. i Could Rant All Day About This Kinda Shit So Let Me Concentrate More On The Feedback. Once Again No Point in Mentioning Multis Or Flow, And The Way u Put Simple Thoughts And Feelings into Context is Another Of ur Strongest Points. Short Drop, But u Got ur Point Across, Keep it Up.

Preciate the feedback fellas.

yeah this was deep homie, dug the message, and the last line wrapped it all up nicely. multis were fire. i thought it was falling off towards the middle but than you brought it right back nice drop homie

peace

I hear snoring... its been a minute lol.

Yeah this drop, like all your others I've read flowed beautifully
I dig what you said about the phonies, and I couldnt agree more.

"Do they thrive for attention or feel their way through the dark/
Not bright enough to see they really hate who they are/"

thats some serious shit right there, my favourite line

also like all da rest said, the last bar just tuned the mood.

id sware i had left some feed back on this a few min ago.. idk whats going on...

OK SICKness
flow is hella nice...
Keeping that flow while getting a point acrss is even better...
Some nice lines.. but hten Ending killed it for sure.

check ur pm bitch haha

Nice Drop Man Im Feelin That...

good wordplay in there...

9/10

PM checked and responded, you cum guzzling skank.

nice flow here
maybe not the most complex
nice hidden meaning sorta shyt
not the nicest vocab
but fo some reason this is dope
i dunno what it is
it jus has it dope shyt mayne
keep'em comin

yo