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Feedback??
Posted: Thu Jun 11, 2009 6:02 pm
by m.c velly
My Words Diabolic Mc's Follow This Cause - Wit Styles So Fermented Im Senteced In Offal Discharge
I Shatter Your Defences With An Offensive Like Gods; M.C Wreckin These Pages And Leavin Em Scarred
Vellys beatin The Odds Like A Book On Your God ; Then I Speak So Fuckin Evil Your People Look At Me Cross
A Lethal Weapon - Verses Deeper Than satans Coffin ; The Chemical Chemist Way Sicker Than Basic Toxins..
jus started this peice. whatcha think so far.
Re: Feedback??
Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 12:15 am
by eMCee Havic
that was pretty dope man, a lil simple, but it flowed well... way too short tho.. but i liked it for a quick read
keep um coming man
Re: Feedback??
Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 2:41 am
by Momeijah
imagery Was Pretty Good And The Flow Was Solid, i Can't Really Leave Detailed Feed Since it's So Short But if u Carry it On Keep it Up Because a Whole Verse at That Level Would Be Dope.
Re: Feedback??
Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 3:15 am
by The Gonz
Shits not bad. Good flow. Presentation could be a little more user friendly i.e. seperate bars. Makes it easier to read, but I had no problem pickin up the flow. I have a sixth sense for that shit. Definitely needs more added to it though. Finish this shit off and post it again. Good start though.
Re: Feedback??
Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 9:35 am
by ReCkinAll
i think it was decent...
keep droppin...
Re: Feedback??
Posted: Sat Jun 13, 2009 5:44 am
by - Mutual -
m.c velly wrote: My Words Diabolic Mc's Follow This Cause -
Wit Styles So Fermented Im Senteced In Offal Discharge
I Shatter Your Defences With An Offensive Like Gods;
M.C Wreckin These Pages And Leavin Em Scarred
Vellys beatin The Odds Like A Book On Your God ;
Then I Speak So Fuckin Evil Your People Look At Me Cross
A Lethal Weapon - Verses Deeper Than satans Coffin ;
The Chemical Chemist Way Sicker Than Basic Toxins..
jus started this peice. whatcha think so far.
u shoulda set it out like this