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TripZ!

Posted: Wed May 20, 2009 10:30 pm
by MesaR
His mind is a jail cell, like stupendous prisons
Horrendous living life of endless visons
He’s the filthy kind
Who’s done horrific things, with no guilty mind
Nothing, Dreaming of lies.
Screaming collides, with the demons inside
Mental?, he’s twice as infected
His life is neglected, from the ice he’s injected
Look at him shake from addiction
He said he’ll break his conviction, fake or fiction?
Now, what’s the truth about his death
Shot to the deck, or was it a noose around his neck
All security, were strongly armed
Now was he a free man, who was wrongly charged?
He was insaine from the scars
Did he do the deeds, and should remain behind bars?
Him dieing, he prevents the glory
Now only he knows the real events of the story.

Re: TripZ!

Posted: Mon May 25, 2009 4:23 am
by K KiLLaH
style is kinda trippy the rhymescheme n structure throw me off the flow but other than that the content is str8 id say a lil above average

Re: TripZ!

Posted: Sun May 31, 2009 3:46 am
by ~Symbolikull~
this was all over the place lil homie... u went from him bein addicted to ice that he injects? then he died but then he was alive then he died again idk where u were goin wit this... the beginnin was dope tho