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my metaphores are blue prints that started from scratch
rapped behind a beat, like i had my heart in my back
i'll bark on a track like a race dog thats never lost in the pack
battling me is like a yellow sign, so caution your raps
you lost in the fact im vicious as a tiger but harder to catch
disbarr your attack like a law student who didnt pass the exam
the nasty with plans like a nympho whoes askin ta dance
my raps are like a perfect craft, they get ya passions enhanced
im fast with my hands like bruce lee but i cant be scene
my hands are as dirty as mud but they cant be cleaned
i amp a dream like phycodelics when your half asleep
cept im attachin speach with hypnotics that youll catch in beats

7 barrs for now.. uppin for some feed

-- Sat May 16, 2009 4:30 am --

can i get some feed back!!!!???? damn

Cant say i was feelin this to the fullest, but u came with sum decent bars and enuff to get u a good rating but each bar just seemed to have no imagination.

Fav line:
my hands are as dirty as mud but they cant be cleaned

6/10

thanks man, i've been trying to work on my similies and metaphores.. so thanks for the constructive feed, still uppin

this was a good 1 bruh, feelin it no doubt...read up on some other stuff you had done and had given it some feed but this is definitely better than what i had read back then. keep honing the craft, homie...