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Im dyin-ta-see a dynasty full of weapons n womens
fuck heven and livin Im wreckin steppin efficent
Im struggling in this reverie wrestlin n winnin
the message of killin had me arrested, convicted
so contsricted, inflicted like aids I die inevitably
so sweet diabetics run in fear thats y their a-head-of-me
I'll eat ur flesh and dunk u salt water to bleed
Hault the prosper of weed, cant be high anymore
ur clowns hecklin, Im king of this hill start acceptin it
I rip-shred-em and cause deficit, I shit-red-from contestin it



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nice shit bro

didnt really enjoy the end of it, fell off a bit

killer in the beginnin tho, the light alliteration with weapons n women makes a catchy intro, n the flow is immaculate in the first half, keep droppin

strated fallin off at the end
a bit short but u started
with the multies very well
had a smooth flow nice vocab
u brought sum good shyt
next time see if u can keep carryin it on
so we have a longer read
it'll improve ya writin skills
keep'em comin