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Hard Journeys

Posted: Fri Apr 24, 2009 6:50 pm
by MesaR
Lately it's been fatal, maybe he's not stable
His Father left him, just as a baby in a cradle
At dinner times, there was no Gravy on the table
Big time rapper, who's looking shady in his label
His going though hard times, it's past funny
Masked and armed, out on the search for fast money
The knife in the kitchen, the strife withing living
but even the weapon cant change the life he's been giving
He's been a wreck, i've asked him if he feels bitter yet
he says nothing, shakes his head, and lights a Ciggarette

Re: Hard Journeys

Posted: Sat Apr 25, 2009 2:09 am
by GrimBlaze
The knife in the kitchen, the strife withing living
but even the weapon cant change the life he's been giving
He's been a wreck, i've asked him if he feels bitter yet
he says nothing, shakes his head, and lights a Ciggarette

^^^favourite part.

nice flow/subject/structure.

longer next time tho.
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