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a few bars

Posted: Fri Apr 24, 2009 8:30 am
by -TraMaTiK-
havent dropped somethin in'a minute soo leave some F-B an ill return it,please&thanks.

its the mack grippin track rippin one an only white boy
im back spittin raps hittin u cuz u aint tight boy
now we can get it homie yes even till the break of dawn
go round for round man tell me how u hate my songs
said u wanna beat my ass we aint gotta wait for long
do some freddy kruger shit an slice till ya face is gone
but i kno u all talk u aint got the balls to try
say u gonna end me? HA thats all a lie
ya i got the heart to fight some just call it pride
treat u like a bitch smack u up watch u fall an cry

Re: a few bars

Posted: Fri Apr 24, 2009 10:10 am
by GrimBlaze
said you aint dropped in a while so maybe thats why this seems a little rusty.

flow was cool for the most part.
up your rhymeschemes and lyrics tho.

next time make it a little longer too because its kinda hard to to get a full impression in just ten bars.1.

Re: a few bars

Posted: Sun Apr 26, 2009 7:16 am
by -TraMaTiK-
thanks man,uppin

Re: a few bars

Posted: Tue Apr 28, 2009 7:41 pm
by Phasewon
pretty good shit, multies were present, the flow was def on point,

"said u wanna beat my ass we aint gotta wait for long
do some freddy kruger shit an slice till ya face is gone"

^that shit was ill, stay up.

Re: a few bars

Posted: Mon May 04, 2009 10:40 am
by ~Symbolikull~
this was nice for a lil short read, felt the flow of it, nice representin in it..

now we can get it homie yes even till the break of dawn
go round for round man tell me how u hate my songs
said u wanna beat my ass we aint gotta wait for long
do some freddy kruger shit an slice till ya face is gone

that stood out to me

Re: a few bars

Posted: Mon May 04, 2009 3:31 pm
by TheBigHurt~
i thought the flow was pretty cool, short and sweet, keep it up cuz.