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Battle Verse Against (G.a.t.)

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Battle Verse Against (G.a.t.)

Posted: Sat Apr 04, 2009 1:45 pm
by Haz
[align=center]Give It Up Like Friendly Whores If You Had 72 Hours To Live U Couldn't Survive Twenty Four!!..
Your Not A P.L.K. Any More.. The Only Time Your 'Bubbling Raw' You Got a Deadly Sore..

Beatin Me His Ass Is Delirious Didnt He Already 'Lose A Title' Like Paul Walker In The Fast N Furious??
This Aint A Me Vs You Debate,You Got No Consistency Your Either 'Good Or Bad' Like The Desicion Humans Make!!

Gat's Wack Fuck Tha Hype Cause Like Gettin Robbed At Night He Aint 'Up Ta Fight' ,
I'll Control Ya Fate,Ya Death..Gay Clown Lay Down..Courts Not The Only Time You'll "Face A RREST"

I'll Give Dis Pess A Merkin..Who Cares When The Heffa's Lerkin..Gat's Considered Everything Cept - A - Person
His Name Will Go 'Over...Time' Like Extra Workin!!..

Take A Look At The Losa's Fate Dood Got Chewed N Ate He Was Baracuda Bait
This Dood 'G.A..TEE Got Ripped' Like I Hate Ludas State!!!!..[/align]

Re: Battle Verse Against (G.a.t.)

Posted: Tue Apr 07, 2009 3:54 am
by complexity
-.HaZarD.- wrote:[align=center]Give It Up Like Friendly Whores If You Had 72 Hours To Live U Couldn't Survive Twenty Four!!..
Your Not A P.L.K. Any More.. The Only Time Your 'Bubbling Raw' You Got a Deadly Sore..

Clever play on words...

Beatin Me His Ass Is Delirious Didnt He Already 'Lose A Title' Like Paul Walker In The Fast N Furious??
This Aint A Me Vs You Debate,You Got No Consistency Your Either 'Good Or Bad' Like The Desicion Humans Make!!

Decent.

Gat's Wack Fuck Tha Hype Cause Like Gettin Robbed At Night He Aint 'Up Ta Fight' ,
I'll Control Ya Fate,Ya Death..Gay Clown Lay Down..Courts Not The Only Time You'll "Face A RREST"

Hmmmm

I'll Give Dis Pess A Merkin..Who Cares When The Heffa's Lerkin..Gat's Considered Everything Cept - A - Person
His Name Will Go 'Over...Time' Like Extra Workin!!..

That was nice.

Take A Look At The Losa's Fate Dood Got Chewed N Ate He Was Baracuda Bait
This Dood 'G.A..TEE Got Ripped' Like I Hate Ludas State!!!!..[/align]
That was probably the best of all of the bars.

Not bad. I would give it a 7/10 for a battle verse. A few of the lines just felt like pure filler.

Posted: Tue Apr 07, 2009 4:16 am
by Momeijah
Line 1, Bar 3 And Bar 5 All Hit Hard, Good Wordplay On The 1st And Last Lines. Always Good To Start And End Strong. The Other Couple Of Punches Were Pretty Basic And i Donno Who This Guy is So Some Of Them Might've Been Personals? The Whole Verse Was Pretty Slick Flow-Wise, Multi-Wise, Entertainment-Wise And Punchline-Wise But it Lacked Some Aggression i Think u Should've Made More Of a Mockery Outta The Guy With More Funny Punches And Personals. i Mean The Wordplays n Shit Were Nice But How Many u Think Really Stung Personally? What im Saying is Don't Try To Make ur Shit Too Clever And Forget They Have To Be Funny And Offensive Lol, But Some Were, Like Bar 2 Was Pretty Personal. Solid Verse Though, Not ur Best But Good Shit.

Posted: Tue Apr 07, 2009 4:32 am
by Quix
meh, overall average verse. Nothing special...Agree wid domino ^

thos were yah best bars!

Posted: Tue Apr 07, 2009 5:56 am
by Haz
lol Shutup Quix ..

Good Looks For The Feed People..
You Right Dom.. Thats My Problem I Write Shit That Go's Over Peoples Heads..
Not Really Shit That Clowns The Fuck Out Of Someone..
I'ma Start Workin On My Clownin In Battles

Posted: Tue Apr 07, 2009 5:58 am
by Quix
LOL ^^

just stating mah oppinion Hater!! oh and i UNDERSTOOD ERYTHNG in that piece ;)
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