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Torn between two worlds, as I struggle with my thoughts/
I killed a man and left him in a ditch - my last resort/
I had no choice - he killed my wife and unborn child/
He took my life so I took his, we struggled for a while/
I killed him slow - I made it look accidental/
so no one guessed that it was me and I would not look mental/
My whole life I was gentle - kind and sentimental/
until the day my wife got taken, thrown into a rental/
They took her to a quiet spot so no one heard her screaming/
they raped her and they beat her, motherfuckers double teaming/
she passed out - whole time I was at work slogging/
I called home - no answer - figured that she was out jogging/
Got home in the evening - this wasn't like her at all/
reported it to police - then I started to bawl/
48 hours later, ring ring, it was the cops/
'you're wife's been found sir - please come meet us at the docks'/
the funeral was dark, cold, and left me so lonely/
but another part of me was born, it was quite unholy/
It made me want to kill, made me want to live for nothing/
a sudden seemless change, it barely took any adjusting/
I quit my job, I faked my death, now I'm a contract killer/
I became what I hate the most, a cold blood spiller....



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Yo man this is nice, couple a' bars could be re-worded for more impact but on the whole i was feeling it nice flow to it aswell. could be a nice audio track

Not bad. Not overly complex but had some decent imagery. Good flow, could use some multies to make it more interesting and sound more fluid. Could have made it longer as well, stretch the story out and get more detailed.

nuff respect for the feeds...definitely want to try doing some audio...any suggestions as to where I start would be hella appreciated. 1