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the law wont let you out once your under they thumb
trapt in the system they got me, the numbers r spun
i wonder how come, millions of people live this way
with the law dogs at your door its hard to get away
rules so strict today the average r averagely fuckd
then they stuck cuz the system is fast feedin cuffs
you ask me its fuckd an unjust how they brandin men
they packing pistols on felons who cant brandish them
only to land in pins or indited on charges n arrested
their cheif investment to get the criminals invested
i detest it, i feel like im infested by my crimes
im borderline genesis insane a poduct of my lifetime



a verse off a song im writing

uppin for feed

heres my Constructive critisism
its a cooh verse, but ur stating the obviouse and wats known. It dosent seem original. Like it feels calm, nothing hard hitting, no impact at all. But ur flow was steady, you were consistant, some good multis. It was solid, I can only complain about the concept and that u should go deeper

overall: 5/10