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recorded yesterday, be honest.......

im bout to take a walk round my trailer hood
happy as can be, in a very nice mood
they know how it be and how it could be
ive always been an outsider,in the Va streets
neva been stapped in the back cuz im too slick
if you try n follow me I guarentte that you will slip
I knew you was full of it but never that It was shit
even with a broken leg I wouldnt ever fuckn trip
you'll never fit my fuckn shoes,so you cant be put
I cant drop out of high school, cuz Im almost through
yes,im immature and thats fur shure
I becha I got more wood then your furninture
the booth aint for waiting, I got the road and, mic raging
putos run dey mouth like homos protesting
say some more shit watch me blow your chest in
say bye to your homies, cuz in piss theyll be resting
ya girl want me n my dick, any more questions
shut ya damn mouth and prepare for some lessons
by this mexican, now pay attention
here I go one more time, now I start stressin
I need my medication, just a can of woop ass
beat you so bad got ya askin whos dat?
its me vato its me homie its me
uno dos tres cuatro oh si
my mente is going atras and forth
Im speakin espaniiol and that english of course
but then again, you could never understand
Im in the US but im just a mexican
To the top im heading, it's not a lie or fable
We stilling property plus the stolen cable

iight, i jus peeped... i liked tha beat a lot, but i feel ya flow was a lil 2 simple, spend a lil more time on ya word play next time.... a few of ya barz didnt rhyme, (1st two barz, trailer hood & nice mood 4 example) n a couple didnt make sence ta me (got more fukin wood then ya furniture???) but on tha posative note, i did like how u mixed som spanish wit english, n that mexican line had me laughin.... all in all this was a iight drop tho
keep spittin
~1hundo
PtathaZ

I dont always rhyme, I mean rap is pretty much poetry, but I guess now I repeated those two words, they really dont but the way I say them they do, thanks for the positives

LOL, yo just sharpen the flow up... make it more to the beat... and add flavor to ya verse. I'd suggest listening to other spanish speaking mcs with a nice following such as Pitbull, Big Pun, South Park Mexicans, Immortal Technique, DYABLO, and listen to their flow and style... listen to how they bring that ego through their lyrics and come alive with it.

I attached some examples of some spanish speaking emcees

One of your better tracks as of recent in my opinion.
Better beat choice too. Your earlier drops, you were just pickin caca.
But I like this latin underground feel that it provided.
You still need to loosen up on your flow and be more fluid when you spit...but that'll come with time I guess. Everyone works at their own pace.

Pitbull...SouthPark Mex...and niggaz like that aren't the best examples of Mexican/American rap in my opinion. You're probably already familiar with them...but just incase you're not, then check out KINTOSOL. Now that's REAL mex-Amer Hip-Hop mayne.

Keep doin yo thang youngblood.