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Posted: **Sat Aug 12, 2006 4:49 am**

unique characteristics, inner and outer beauty
sue me, but i just had to touch her booty
laugh unexplained,glad shes entertained
life tears you apart, the knife stares at my heart
i liked her hair, and she was smart
but i knew life with her could not start
so i guided her to the park
i can she was scared cause it was dark
the knife glared in the dark
so i...where do i start.

lol idk i just tried again pretty lame huh

Posted: **Sun Aug 13, 2006 5:52 am**

lmao. Should have called it the rape, it was worth reading, but not that special 6/10.

Posted: **Mon Aug 14, 2006 12:39 am**

I think you missed a word on line 8. It was short too.

Posted: **Mon Aug 21, 2006 9:31 am**

ummmmm.... ?

Posted: **Mon Aug 21, 2006 10:25 am**

PrecisE wrote:ummmmm.... ?

woooorrdddd......

Posted: **Mon Aug 21, 2006 12:17 pm**

lmao seriously, i just wrote somethin i have no idea why i wrote this, or where it came from...

Posted: **Mon Aug 21, 2006 1:13 pm**

haha thats cool, subliminal huh?

Posted: **Mon Aug 21, 2006 7:08 pm**

yea i guess so..it isnt that bad when i read it again..

Posted: **Tue Aug 22, 2006 3:40 am**

you wrote on line 8 "i can she was scared cause it was dark" . is it "i can see she..." cuz if its not ill have to study english again.

Posted: **Tue Aug 22, 2006 4:25 am**

yea it was just a typo sub

Posted: **Tue Sep 12, 2006 2:45 pm**

Not bad...keep going

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