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Let me know what yall think about my first drop on this site, just something quick.


Its Webbz Bitch And Im Bringin In A New Wave Of Game//
Im Like Seasons.. Forever Changin' While Yall Stay The Same//
Make Ya Bitch Say My Name While You Fuckin Wit My Seconds//
If 'Being A Pussy' Was A Class Dawg You Could Teach The Lessons//
I Beat Bitches Down Like Layla Ali While Im Blazin My Leafs//
See Your Like Stephon Mauburry.. Nigga Cant Stay Wit The Team//
Give It Up Man, You Cant See My Shit Like I Done Flushed It//
Come Get Stucked Kid & Not Even Pepto Will Help Ya Gut Bitch//
Yall Niggas Easy.. Like Ray Allens Free Throws.. Weak Hoes//
See Imma Just Say Bye & Move On To New Bills Like T.O//


Hit me up, criticism is always taken as constructive criticism. 1

Welcome cuzzo! 1st things 1st. You gotta give feedback to another drop before postin your drop. And you must post ya feedback link in your drop. I'll definately give u feed but AFTER you give feed elsewhere and post ya link.

My fault bro, here ya go.


http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/jus-b ... 12604.html

^thanks mayne!

Feedback time

I like the flow of ya verse. Nice and steady, content wise it's okay. a few lines I like such as the maurberry line and that t.o. Shit. A lot of it was somewhat filler-like. It read like an audio drop in my view. Anyways, decent job here man! Show me what else ya got in ya arsenal!

this was aight homey..a couple a good concepts ..a bit a filler
only prob to me is theres alot of similies..some people like that alot
but i personally try to keep it between 1 every 2 bars at most..
that's just IMO..anyway this was a...

good drop though..i like ya rhyme scheme/structure...1

i think tha drop was dun up nice...im new here myself so my feed mite not b helpful but u def had good structure n flow. i agree on tht TO line it was ill. cood prolly work on ya metaphors n multis a lil more but agen im new here so i cood b wrong..anyways i liked it n keep writin n as long as u put ya hart into it nobody can say tht u aint doin ya thang

Come Get Stucked Kid & Not Even Pepto Will Help Ya Gut Bitch

^Lol

Overall, not too bad. Had good flow, could easily be spit over a track. Fairly consistent with the punches and similies. Nothing ground breaking, but it didn't suck lol. Keep posting, if anything, do some audios.

yeah this was quite good, there was presence and skillz but it was exactly what ud expect in a 1st verse

i wqould reccomend working on increasing ya vocabulary and wordplay to really bring interest into a written punchline