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Got the random urge to write. So here it is:
(If you leave feed I'll return the favor. If you dont have something posted thats easy to find, leave a link)


im nice as fuck, the lines is stuffed, like pounds of pine in trucks,
i size em up, you aint live as us, your ugly betty petty life is stuck...

ayo..

a breather and a break, no thanks, i need plenty of green in both banks,
plenty of trees, blow dank, yo, think you bout it, but ur flow so-tanks,
There are no thanks....no praises, no patients there is no waitin,
get up off me, you wishy washy... bro's hatin is so blatant,
see i propose cakin....bout stackin loot kid, man snap and move it,
on some super new massacre music, a teacher, never passed by students,
ayo we pass right through this, beastin, stay feastin, an unsurpassable movement,
yo im the true-ist, true truant to do this, hustle up grands movin a few units..
ya moves is too stupid...you slow pokes is an old joke that gets old slow,
you so-hoe, talking bout movin boatloads of coco to soho, you? thats a no-go..
i gotta pro-glow...see im clean as fuck, dont need to reach for pumps,
dont mean to be mean but i eat em up, the lean machine finna feast on guts...

Good Flow To it, And i Could See a Lot Of South influence. Good For a Self Hype Verse But Loads Of Punches Are Allllways Great For Spicing These Drops Up. The Multis, inners And Flow Were Definitely The Stand Out Though, They Were Strung Together Very intricately And Made ur Verse Flow into The Brain a Lot Smoother And Easier, Like Driving Along a Deserted Road as Opposed To a Busy One. Definitely Try To Add Some Little Fancy 'Stunts' in These Self Hype Drops in Future Though, Like Metaphors, Wordplays, General One Liner Witticisms Etc Etc.

^appreciate the feedback.


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this was nice
the flow was better than i expected
the multies was aiight
this was a good comeback maybe cuda been done better
but i think this is pretty dope
keep'em comin