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El Original Feat. Akon

[Verse 1]
Its sad to say that im lonely
im drinkin till i hit morning
its hard to find your real homies
when you think they cool but they phonyes
I think of you when im sleeping
close your eyes baby girl no peeking
for your heart baby girl im seeking
and your body temperature increasing
Now take a sip of this henny
dont hesitate of my spending
our love is strong never ending
romantic dinner at dennis
The day you leave me im crying
thats why my heart will keep trying
from fallin to the dark and dying
just kiddin baby girl im lying

[Verse 2]
Son las doce de la manana
Levantandonos de la cama
Hoy vamos ir a la playa
Ahorrita despues que te banas
Si no te tengo a mi lado
me pongo loco como chango
-el dinero no es tanto
como usted que no estas escuchando
Tu eres mi nina mi novia
Yo ya se que tu me adoras
Olvidate de las otras
que ellas son puras demonias
Tu eres mi pan con mi leche
Yo soy tu unico ese
-Yo naci por quererte
No me importa que dice la gente

6 views and no posts. i dont get it did i do too perfect on this or what?

I was always kinda feelin this beat. Akon definately killed this shit when first released it.
Anyways...nigga i know you didn'y say romantic dinner at Denny's! lol Thats kind of an oximoron...thats almost like sayin that you're gonna take a luxury cruise on a tug-boat! lmao
But no hate...it was a decent track. You need to put more "playa-like" swagger behind your presentation. Feel me!? Like...it's a song for the ladies right? Well you gotta sell that shit to the ladies! Make them really vibe wit what you're sayin!
Sell the audience...this is very important.
My honest opinion...I thought the second verse was rawer than the first. You're ryhme scheme in spanish is on point and rides the beat perfecto! Again...just need a lil more stylish presentation behind it! Need sum swagger son!
Work on your presentation some, then come back and do this joint again. By then the shit should be a banger!!!
Nice job overall.

I gotta agree wit Kurse u gotta work on dat playa flow dis track don't fit ya dawg no offense u sound like ur bored I kno u don't holla at females like dat and Denny's ain't romantic haha shit was funny dat u said dat but ay fuck it dats all u finna take my lady 2 Olive Garden haha keep droppin and keep workin on ur flow kid 1