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Posted: **Thu Feb 05, 2009 7:11 pm**

[align=center]We're tired
don't know about you but i am
Where are we now? I'm lost
Forget everything that was said
Because it doesn't matter now
Motionless sunrays
And vapid moon light
Shine their ugly provocations in your eyes
So beautiful and quaint ...
Hold on, what the hell am i thinking?

I should've known this would happen again
My chest is ripped in shreds
I doubt you can make it worse
I keep telling myself I'm over it
But honestly you just piss me off
We're so close, but so far
I guess the question is
who out of us wants it more?

You dont want anything yet?
Damn that hurts.
I could've sworn you wanted to be more than just friends
You've turned me sideways but this is far as i can bend
I thought you felt the same way
I still don't know what the hell this is all about
Screw a lunch date
Because you'll screw me over then
You say you feel so much. You SAY you do
But it'd be nice if you acted that way too
So over and over, i try to forget
But your smile is in my head
I've probably screwed it beyond repair
But to lose it im prepared
It just depends who waves the white flag first
And i'm telling you honey, it might be me[/align]

Posted: **Fri Feb 06, 2009 3:41 pm**

damn,, dogg sounds like you got burned in a bad way. i like this poem tho definatly had emotion which is a good fuel for poetry. i give it a 8 i liked it, cuz i've been there before.. keep up the poetry and peep my poems "the virus" and "i am a bullet"

peace

Posted: **Sat Feb 07, 2009 5:53 pm**

thanks for the feed . Upping .

Posted: **Sat Feb 21, 2009 2:04 am**

I sometimes forget how young you are based strictly on your writing. And growing up quick will fuck you up like that lol. Good shit though. I like how you're finally coming into your style.

Posted: **Mon Mar 23, 2009 7:37 pm**

i think this is a creative piece and is spoken from experience, and experience always creats the best flowing most descriptive forms of expression. hopefully you go through something more positive and present it in this way, I wish bad on no one. great job. big upz 1

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