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before i just start ripping up with actual verse scriptures, im going to drop a collection of cypher shits ive done..

All of this was keystyled. Meaning:
typed on computer with no written references.
I know theirs no such thing as freestyling in text...
Ok.

Behold, As I Go Into Gangsta Mode, Rifle on A Stand – Too heavy to Hold.
Just lettin' You know Your head's in the Scope. – I'm bettin it Goes left of your Nose.
Whoa. Now that's an Eye Shot. I Bring More Fatalities Than Noob Saibot
You don't want to battle Me with Tha' Tools Ive Got.
Got this one Bullet that'll connect N Spread to Five spots.
.You Expect A Spare Tec to Tear Flesh?
Never In-Vest - Bullets Deflect Bare Chest.
Scared Yet? A Spare Breath Connects to Scared Guests
Severs Their Necks - Death from the Air of a Vet.
Phe's a Fitness, I'm working these Bitches
Put a Dot on Your head, Like a Certain religion.
I'm The person to Visit When it Comes to Precision.
Shot Never Misses. Perfect Attendance.
Every Person Can Witness, Purchase A Ticket?
Any Person With Vision, Certain Admission.

Merk is the Mission, I Kill unbiasedly
To Visit My Victims , Just look inside Of Me.
You'll see Whats left, the Pieces and Fragments.
Of Fools of have Risen, But fell to The Madness.
I'm one of The Baddest. That's just my Advantage.
I best My oppoenets, Access The Damage.

I hate kids who come and Whine about Crap, People who Post they're punchlines in ALL-CAPS.
I hate people who Brag about who theyve beat...But leave out they're losses and they're numerous defeats..
I hate people who hy-pho-nate-they're-multiples, I-would-say-it-Makes-them-vulnerable.
I hate people who Cry about wayne,If you don't like em O-k. His fan's are to blame.
I HATE people who complain about hip-hops state...When it's you the consumers who make or break..
I hate alot of things...But those were a few...And if your any one of those things..I probably hate you.

ty for reading. just want your critique on some of the things i should work on based off of this.

for cypher drops this was pretty decent, i think ive seen them all before while cruising thru that section

considering its keystyle i dont really have anything to critique about it, there were punch attempts, and some decent rhymes, keep at it

this was pretty nice for some key shit, multies were present, some a lil forced, but that's what's gonna happen when you key it up on the spot without putting too much thought process into it, so putting 'keystyle' into consideration it was nice. my only crit' is try not to fall into the trap of 'net mc' and avoid lines like this,

"People who Post they're punchlines in ALL-CAPS."

if you're just rapping about net shit, the verse is ultimately pointless if you couldn't spit it in real life or over a beat, but this shit was good for what it was.

That whole “I hateâ€