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its like i wanna smile
be happy and shit but...
i'm getting less and less reasons to as days go by
life sucks yo
this is a love story though don't get it twisted

me and you were one of a kind
a wonderful kinda fucked up personas
immune to drama we moved & prospered
we'd do whatever just too sooth the awkward
feeling we both were conceiling
popping happy pills dropping massive bills
on drinks and things to be laughing still
we both knew it was more than that
but both weren't really to sure of that
so neither of us made a move
just played it smooth layed in coupes
gazed in blue skys believing true lies
both thinking in due time we could move like
one smooth unit a happy couple
we'd spaz and scuffle but we had eachother
but most importantly what we had was love boo
i was glad to touch you but had no rush to
for some reason i guess this is what loves like
just like two birds of a feather
the words and the letters of your messages
on my phone when i'm alone depressed again
make me remember when we'd spend time
giving me a vexed mind cause you ain't here
god took one of the few things dear
away from me my one great lovely
hunny that was more than just a nut to me
i'm gonna quit writing now its a hard issue
goddamn i just wish i was in that car with you

this is a true story btw

nice ending, rhyming wasnt so great, but the scheme was, dope story, idk to me it seemed kind of like a poem but yea i liked it.

its wrote kinda poetical cause of the beat i wrote it to, i'm going to record this in a week or so

i just wrote this after coming back from the hospital last night before i went to sleep didn't really focus too much on the technical aspects of it

but yeah, thanks for the feedback i'll return the favor

This was unexpected. I liked it though. Told a sad story. All Killah actually in love is something else hard to grasp. But this little poem/song, was evidence. Nice job.

This was unexpected. I liked it though. Told a sad story. All Killah actually in love is something else hard to grasp. But this little poem/song, was evidence. Nice job.

it was hard to grasp for me at first too but then once i eventually accepted it, she was gone... the psych doubled my med's so its kinda getting better but death ain't never easy to deal with

thanks for the feed, i'll return feedback just drop a link on whatever you want commented on