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Hell on Earth

Posted: Wed Jan 21, 2009 3:31 am
by eMCee Havic
Chorus:x2
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Whats the word
ive been cursed since birth
man its just
Hell on earth
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;;;;;New chorus:;;;;

death spreading the surface of earth
fire engulfs as cities are swallowed in surf
no body knows if its gonna get worse
maybe its just that we're all cursed
man its just hell on earth



Verse 1

fire rising surprising my eyes when
i see these demons where i've been
fucking,
rising through these cities
most know the life lived will be shitty
charred scarrs the footprints of demons
flipped cars on bolivards, babies screamin
infection spreading terror is terrorism
most run too damn scared to listen
preachers preach the revelation in churches
not certain as hell and earth merges
some blame their governments for forsakin us
skeletons on the roads turnin to pavement dust
who is savin us?
as the devils decifles load up their rifles
shootin any motherfucker totein a bible
the worlds in ruins
big cities are filled wit their own sewage
the grand nuciance?
the fire ravaged dangerous chemical fluids
making even the air to noctious to breathe
half the world dies out the rest all live in greed



Chorus:x2

death spreading the surface of earth
fire engulfs as cities are swallowed in surf
no body knows if its gonna get worse
maybe its just that we're all cursed
man its just hell on earth


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added:
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Tattered buildings most conceal weapons
people check the dead, where most paid their sentance
alot of questions scolding god 4 what's destined
plagues on cities its chemical warfare
it travels the seas killin all who come near
bodies torn bare, for food and supplies
while deformed folks scream wishin theyd die
insanity runs through cities like typhoons
standing cunfused gouging their eyes prayin to die soon
in despiration no one knows what they might do
saints turn to judisists quick to knife fools
people just like you,
no one gets high, if you survived theres no worry 4 drugs
just watching your back for theives killers and thugs
90% of the earth's wildlife was devastated
only the rodents survive in the ruins they colinated
hope grows to sorrow as life is terminated
all a reactions to the conditions humans created

chorus:
death spreading the surface of earth
fire engulfs as cities are swallowed in surf
no body knows if its gonna get worse
maybe were all cursed
man its time its hell on earth


Verse 3


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up dated
just a song im working on would apreciate some feed

Posted: Thu Jan 22, 2009 1:58 pm
by ScottJames
dude this was dope shit throughout!!

as the devils decifles load up their rifles
shootin any motherfucker totein a bible


i honestly really liked it, the chorus is lame....but the verse is sick
i wanna read the rest of it!!

Posted: Fri Jan 23, 2009 11:46 am
by eMCee Havic
thanks
i uppdated added another verse
apreciate some more feed

Posted: Fri Jan 23, 2009 12:58 pm
by K.O.
dope. question its called hell on earth. was that named after the mobb deep song? and are you using that beat, cuz that beat is bananas.

Posted: Fri Jan 23, 2009 5:20 pm
by Brah-Vo
Chorus is whack ..
But agreed with scott james.

Didnt know you had it in MD . Im impressed

Posted: Sat Jan 24, 2009 12:13 am
by Phenom
Good shit right here…Overall I give it a 8.0/10
That chorus can go though, lol.

Posted: Sat Jan 24, 2009 4:46 am
by HKX
Keep da old chorus 1st one is dope 2nd one its aight but wat u could do is keep da 1st hook and add sum of da 2nd hook after u do da 1st feel me dat way it u won't be repeatin urself , dis drop was nice dawg u got off on it liked da whole concept 8/10 keep droppin and record dis nigga

Posted: Sat Jan 24, 2009 9:09 am
by K.O.
i agree with the chorus so thats like 8 people. but you still get an 8.5 of 10. switch shit up, make it more complex, or just scrap it.