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as a young child, i experienced the unimaginable
glady left the life, but still enemies threat my life
my comprehension in this dimension is unknown
ive grown, and now the real world im shown
mother always worked hard until she died
and never blamed us, until she cried
my brother caused pain, my name brought shame
we were both bringing her pain, it destroyed my heart to see her slain
but i couldnt continue beating my self mindless
so i walked into the world of blindness
brought my passions with me, and a bag that was empty
no one would get me, til i made it a history
my way of getting by was, deadly but yet profitable
til this day i keep say, possibilities are impossible.

hm i like poems, i might just start writing 1 a week or even daily, feedback plz..

PRETTY GOOD, I ADMIRE YOUR HONESTY - BUT WAT MUST BE KEPT IN MIND IS THAT A POET IS A POET- IF YOU ARE TO WRITE POETRY IT CANNOT BE A CONSCIOUS DECISION TO DO SO- IF YOU ARE COMPELLED TO WRITE, THEN WRITING IS YOUR PURPOSE- IF WRITING BEOCMES ROUTINE, WRITING IS YOUR DESIRE- DO NOT CONFUSE APPRECIATION FOR UNDERSTANDING. I ADMIRE YOUR INTERST IN POETRY AND ITS MANY FORMS, YOU HAV MY FULL SUPPORT, CONTRIBUTE AND EVOLVE
PEACE
SPARROW

pretty good poem

ty still not a fan?

NOOOOOOPE.