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I can't seem to find the words to say
It might even sound absurd
But even if i spill it out
The jig is up and i forget.

Throw Away The Clock,because time means nothing
A day passes in an hour,because time means nothing
I could stay here forever,because time means nothing
The cuckoo would never rain on our parade
Because time means nothing.
When im with you.

Even if you leave right now, it doesn't matter
Because i know i'll see you again tomorrow
Sorrow isnt in my dictionary, this moment we borrowed
We'll miss the hour now, but we'll have dozens after

Lets Rip up all the calendars
and pretend my watch isn't working
Forget the countdown to new years
Just get comfortable honey,
because we'll be here for a while..

Ok, so yeah, this is good, but not nearly as good as what you're capable of. Dude, I'm talking about shit like this:

Adolescence and puberty is like a rubik's cube. You can go in every direction and never find a solution, or follow a particular algorithm and finish without a fuss.

You've got the vocabulary, use it to your advantage. For your age you're a very talented writer, and you can go so much further, I'd like to see something comparable to your journal entries come out in your next piece vocabulary and context wise.

This is still good, just work it out.

Yeah it was a nice drop, it just neeed a lil more to it
don't know exactly what but still was a decent read.

was a dope read you write well
hopefully u follow up on that later on in your life