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Bang,Bang->(828 kill)
Posted: Sat Jan 10, 2009 5:05 am
by 3lmo
the first verse is for 2 guys that tryed to mess wit my girl
them foos are 23 n up, my girl jus turned 17....tell me wat yall think.
Posted: Sun Jan 11, 2009 2:41 am
by Bonz
this on the real i wasent feelin. the lyriks was off mic quality wasent that good. and u said 828 and 804 so is u from the Carolinas.
-=HOLLA FRONT=-
Posted: Mon Jan 12, 2009 7:24 am
by Lawgix
i couldn't listen to all of it... i really didn't care for it... the way u were spittin was annoying... and the beat was just weird... iuno i really didn't like it... good effort tho
Posted: Thu Jan 15, 2009 10:35 am
by HKX
da beat is sick but ur flow was weird as hell, no offense if some nigga was fuckin wit my girl i would've came harder, there's no emotion in ur track sounds like ur talkin not flowin and ur off topic, matter of fact i got a track called A-Town's Bozo and shatted on da nigga dat tried beefin wit my lady and I smacked dat nigga in da face and i didn't even noticed i did till my lady told me lol so yea work on ur flow dawg cuz I wasn't feelin it at all nice try tho but deffo work on ur flow dawg and keep droppin
Posted: Sat Jan 17, 2009 6:15 pm
by Kurse
Sorry 3lmo...gotta agree wit some of the things i'm reading from these other niggaz. HK is right...if this was a diss to sum niggaz that were tryin to creep up wit your lady, then you should've came off like a GOON!
Hard lyrical threats nigga...say niggaz names on the track...point 'em out, point 'em out! Know what I'm sayin?
If you're girl is 17, how old are you? Cuz that effect on your voice sounds like ass fammo...not to be talkin shit, but for realz, i was not vibing with that at all. You sounded like the movie preview announcer guy tryin to rap!
It just wasn't workin. lol
But aye...don't let this feedback discourage you. Take these thoughts and compute it all. Make a doper diss track and really think it out. Also use your real voice and then drop it over here on illest for us to hear.
Keep elevating and doin you homie.
Posted: Wed Jan 21, 2009 4:56 am
by 3lmo
alright yall, Ima do one over and see wat yall think, I only used the effect I like it but i guess yall dont but its koo
Posted: Wed Jan 21, 2009 5:17 am
by Kurse
The effect just sounds overly phonie becuz it doesn't sound like a natural voice does. Just spit it in ur own voice...throw personal shit in there dissin a nigga, really stir up the beef...ya feel me!? U gonna service a nigga, then you're goin to have to clown him...make dat ass look like a fool!