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[align=center]I Don't Know Or Understand Why I Choose To Bruise my Face
Livin A Lie is Like Findin Gold But The Truth Is Waste
Almost self delusional, pack the booze in case
Hardest decision i ever made was what pill to take
But i still chill with yae and i kill fa pay
I get the deal done
but momma still insist her son
kneel down and pray
I look at her cryin face .. i frown and say
"Aint nobody gonna save me today .."
She puts her withered hands to her face
Though i cant
take the guilt so i leave in haste
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I wander the cold streets.. the jungle i rule
i leave bodies with cold feet
And bring the thunder to fools
i leave them in better bliss then sex
Starin at his eyes so distant
it was i who kissed him
No more breath bereaves the kiss of death
Bring families to grieve and yet
They dont understand what it means to die[/align]

bump this omg

this was a good read
the flow was consistent
but maybe fell off a lil in parts
had sum good multies
which thru the flow off a lil
but still was good
the subject was i think unique but
thats cus i aint seen anybody else do it
so props to ya on that
keep'em comin

thansk for the feed ... parts 2 and 3 coming up soon

upping

You tried To Flip your Style First Verse
I Didnt like it Personally, didnt Feel like it Brought That much Impact.
But i see You were still trying to come a Little Complex.. Keep workin on that

At First The Second verse was a Little scrambled in My eyes,
Then it got more Solid towards the End with The Kiss of death line

I Mean its a Cool topic you Should Do More With it Next time Fam.

TRy Workin With The Concept Again... What doesnt Kill You Makes you Better...

good lookin out on the feed haz. much appreciated all.
Just a lil more feed and part 2 and 3 go up

good read Dude....I liked it!