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Posted: Sat Dec 27, 2008 7:45 pm
by TreTru
dass a crazy ass concept..
the flow was good when i rapped it out bet.
i liked the second half best accept the "i couldnt embrace it part"
i lost that meaning honestly..
as far as your message well described..
more double syll. rhymes nice
this would actually make a good audio IMO nice flow..
Posted: Sat Dec 27, 2008 7:53 pm
by The Gonz
Flow was definitely on point, so were the multies. Decent imagery, I always enjoy a twisted story. Of course, it could have been longer and more in depth, but still painted a good picture.
Posted: Sun Dec 28, 2008 1:55 pm
by Haz
Said Dont An Still Got Slapped in Tha Face
Do it Again Bitch And Ya Askin Fa Rape
Hostile As Hell , Way to Eminem It..
Tryin Ta Get Away But Lacked An Escape
Back Peddlin While My Back Gettin Scraped
Beautiful Wordin... just Change back To 'Backs Gettin Scraped'
Just Closed My Eyes And Tried To Walk Away
Fell Asleep Quick Cuz i Didnt Wanna Talk Today
Word I Always Feel Like That Family...
Alot Of Meanin..
in A Deep Sleep i Heard Blood Curdlin Screams
it Was All in My Head Just Havin Murderous Dreams
Goin Insane.. Again Beautiful Wordin, Substance Is Packed In One Bar..
Grabbed Her By Tha Head i Was Pullin Her Hair Out
A Hand Wrapped Around Her Throat Not Lettin Tha Air Out
Lettin No Air<< Word Of Been Better Wordin None The Less.. ill!..
Started To Hear Quiet Garglin Then Started Snarlin
Dreamin About Beatin Tha Bitch Like it Was A Bargain
Lmaooo @ Like It Was a Bargain , This Guys Fuckin Nuts!!..
Grabbed A Hammer And Started Smashin Her Face in
i Couldnt Embrace it Suddenly Turned Jason
Imagery's There...Still On Topic.. Multis Of Course.. Flows On Point So Far In The Piece.. Dood Is Killin it..
Grabbed A Lighter And Left Her Masked With Burns And Abrasions
it Then Started Rainin Blood Left Behind i Traced My Name in
wooooow @ The Imagery Of ya Name In Blood... Nice Wordin Again
i Heard One Last Thunderin Scream
Then i Woke Up Sweatin Only This Wasnt A Dream....
WOW!!... Nice Twist.. ill As Fuck...
Ready.
I Don't Ca`re If It Was short..
THis Was a ill As Piece Family
& Tha Thing U U Executed What I Couldnt In My Last Topical
A Twisted Endin , i Was Really Feelin This Fame.
Multis Were There Flow Was There Substance Was Up,
You just Explored As a Writer ..
You Get Back What you Give In And That's a 10 Outta 10.
Whoever Wants To Knock My Ratin can Suck a Dick...
Good Shit J, Deff Feelin it...
Thanks 4 Tha Feed To Fam. 1
Posted: Sun Dec 28, 2008 2:02 pm
by Viral
lol dis was coo...murderous shit....n u stayed on topic..multis n flow were on point...good shit man
Posted: Sun Dec 28, 2008 2:32 pm
by Kurse
That shit was sick! lmao
Reminds me of the "This Ain't Over" track I did.
...only more vicious ofcourse lol
Good imagery through words...my favorite parts were...
"Started To Hear Quiet Garglin Then Started Snarlin
Dreamin About Beatin Tha Bitch Like it Was A Bargain
Grabbed A Hammer And Started Smashin Her Face in
i Couldnt Embrace it Suddenly Turned Jason
Grabbed A Lighter And Left Her Masked With Burns And Abrasions
it Then Started Rainin Blood Left Behind i Traced My Name in"
HANDSDOWN...the sickest bars in the whole drop! imo
What made it even better was that those bars were consecutive!
Shit was brutal to say the least.
Makes me wanna go beat my bitch!
Very nice gypsy. Very niceeeeee.
Posted: Tue Dec 30, 2008 2:55 am
by - Mutual -
nice piece here had a good flow
nice feeling too with some good multies
Grabbed A Lighter And Left Her Masked With Burns And Abrasions
it Then Started Rainin Blood Left Behind i Traced My Name in
my fave bit
nice peice here
keep'em comin