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Believe in karma? Some do. Some don't. I myself personally believe whatever goes around comes around. Reputation-wise...music-wise...beef-wise...
...I've buried alot of individuals. But if reality folds the way that I believe it to happen...
...at somepoint, I'm going to get buried as well. And since "What goes around, comes around"...technically all I did was bury myself. You can't be on top forever. At somepoint we all take a fall. This is my story of being buried...or "inside the box" as I put it.
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"Inside the Box"
Kurse
Album: Insomnia
Written By: R. Bueno
Mixed By: R. Bueno
Produced By: Shadowville
Recorded @ B1-Studio in Joliet, IL
Anger Manij'ment Entertainment Inc.
All Rights Reserved 2008 ©

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Lyrics:
VERSE #1:
You ever wake up, and things were different!?..
From when you fell asleep last, you're now distant.
Miles from your former self, you search for help...
..but nobody can hear you yell.
Lost like a needle burrowed into a haystack..
..your loved ones try to save you but you want them to stay back!
"Leave me alone, I can beat this on my own..
..the demon's are leading me into sumthin I can't control."
To each his own.
I know this is getting old, but there's sumthin you should know..
..it an encumbrance to my soul.
It's bitter cold, my mortal being is beaten and it's feelin as if my inner spirit
..is up and leavin.
It's been deceiving, but I can cope wit the lies..
..I'm only feedin my mind when I'm savoring wit the eyes.
I've tasted life, I'm hungry now..
..so..
..feed me more, I'll tell you how.

HOOK:
Wrap 'em up now...put him in a box.
Bury a hammer to the nail until it locks.
Get the ropes and lower 'em deep.
This is how I put my enemies to sleep.
What goes around comes around...
..and I'm also destined to hear the very same sound.
The pounding of the nails into my box.
I'm embracing the thought of eternal sleep until my heart stops.

VERSE #2:
Now there's alot of things dat I done thought about..
premonitions of me standing next to myself..
..talkin it out..
..Devil's side yelling outloud..
..while the Angel's side is calm and collected standin up on a cloud.
The epic battle between the good and the evil..
..has got my mind on retrieval of memories that were feeble.
Lil' things from back in the day..
..the memories fade while I beg 'em to stay.
The teardrops runnin down my face, plead my case.
Burn scars into my skin..
..and then replace, any hopes that I had before..
..wit an epiphany of catastrophic theories in store.
Furthermore...it was bound to happen..
..in retaliation because of my morbid actions.
It's true...your past catches up to you.
..I didn't wanna do it...but I was forced to.

HOOK:
(refrains x1 time)

VERSE #3:
They say never bite the hand that feeds you..
..but the haters are starving still so you know dat they need to.
They live in glass houses, we see through..
..metaphorically on a high-horse, but I'm beneath you!?
Mannn..
..where's your train of thought?
It must've derailed before the destination was sought.
And me?
My destination's a box.
And not the kind that slides into a dresser wit T-shirts and socks.
Mine's the kind that brings me closer to Lucifer..
I'm engaged to 'Lady Death', so you know I'm seducing her!
Ohhh what a tangled web I weave..
..it's getting harder to breath, it's so suffocating to me.
What have I done!? How did this happen?
Outside of the box all I can hear is the hammers clappin.
One-by-One...they seal my fate.
I..
..did it to myself. I'm too late.

HOOK:
(refrains x1 time)

man this was pretty dope
Karma..
had a nice feel to it
an who knows it maybe true
good flow to the beat
sum of yhe imagery was pretty dope
man this was a good listen
i enjoyed it so
keep'em comin

Okay, i just read the interview, and i really like the idea for the track.. grea t concept.. lets hope you can pull it off..

i also seen the "more lyrical" setence in the shout box... i know i commented you on that (sorry my msn been broken, so aint been able to back up thos statements), so i'll give that twist some consideration too...

beat got a nice feel, the violins are pretty cool.. kinda has a mysterious theme to it..

first verse was cool.. i didnt really see how it had alot to do with the topic imo... just seemed to go on randomly, about waking/sleeping and being different.. lyrics where okay.. there was no stand out line to me.. some of the -eaten-believin-even-being-feeden rhymes where okay.. but they been used alot in alot of pieces, so they kind of lose their power... first half of the flow on this was crack.. enough said.. and 2nd part wasnt far behind..

hook - was cool.. gets back on topic, flow is solid.. nice little piece.. i would have called this.. "What goes around"....

and done the hook like:

"what goes around comes around", when i beat my enemies down
"what goes around comes around", and they buried deep, feelin' drowned
"what goes around comes around", now they just silence in the ground
"what goes around comes around", am i destined to hear the same sound?

"what goes around comes around", every opponent that i face
"what goes around comes around", every foe that gets blazed
"what goes around comes around", drop each one with intense hate
"what goes around comes around", am i just sealin' my own fate?

get it?

in your hook you say "the very same sound", that sounds forced to me, like your trying to make it fit, as i personally wouldnt use a phrase like that in the situation (or have that combo of words in that order)

verse 2- similar to the first, no stand out lines.. didnt really see any dope multis.. just more frequent one word rhyming.. is really the stand out device.. tbf "memories fade while i beg em to stay" is a tight line.. i liked the concept between evil and good, and you stayed on topic with this, mainly because of the last 3rd of this.. the first bit of this flowed a little off for me.. but it got back on track.. nice verse

3rd verse - kept on topic well again.. opener was cool.. nice idea.. its the little things tho.. imo you should have left out the word still in the second line, its unecessary and it felt like you rushed that bit to get it in, which made that bit sound off. high horse line was cool, tho im a little unsure if you or the haters are on the horse lol, one way it wouldnt make a lot of sense. next line was cool, as was the next one. seducing line cool too, the next line was off imo "harder to breathe, so suffocating to me" is an awkard phrase and the few words before the suffocating bit explains the next bit, its like saying.. "theres food in my mouth and im chewing, now im eating" etc lol.. one works without the other.. closer is cool too, nice though and ending.. flow was smooth on this one...

overall - technically - the track is mixed well, the levels sound nice..
emotion is good, riding the beat is good, on a good beat choice.
flow was good for most of it.. no real complaints.. topic was awesome, and was pulled off well enough..

lyrically, this was definately better than some of your other pieces, tho its still not next level imo... you definately have talent, but i would suggest more multis, cleverer thoughts and try a different way of wording certain ideas to freshen up your style.. theres definite potential in this track..

overall i give it a 8/10... good job..

i feel this one first half of the hook is actually pretty bananas with the imagery..the mixx sounds good..single track audio style..tight

I like ya flo real steady and sure..nice vocab for an audio IMO ..
I cant fully hear the bass and shyt on my pc speaks but it
it sounds good to me...

tight ass drop homey..

Actually, thatguyouhate, basically everybody does use multis (As does Kurse although not to the greatest extent). Besides if we are talking about the 80's. Lol. As Kurse will more in the coming years, trust me, on that one.

My favorite verse was the second. I thought this song was extremely deep, well thought out, and everything added up. All three aspects very important in a drop like this.

The vocabulary was a lot better than usual.

'Now there's alot of things dat I done thought about..
premonitions of me standing next to myself..
..talkin it out.. '

I think, you had a lot of very creative concepts in this drop, I'll have to disagree with MagicMark on that one.

The flow was good and it was just a well put together track.

I wouldn't say this proves you're RAKIM or even Talib Kweli, but its definitely more of my style.

I like the fact that Kurse just hasn't dived into multi syllable rhyming and has gradually just kept improving his writing because one of his main strengths is his fluidity and to lose that would be tragic.

love the track, instrumental sets the tone for it nicely, tre tru was right about your use of imagery, its pretty extensive n sucks you into the story, your rhymes actually seem to be gettin more complex than they used to be,

enjoyed it man, well done

Beat Was Nasty
I Was Feeling The Concept Fam..
Honestly now That I Think About it ..
i Mean you Aint Fuckin With Me Lyrically lmfao Let Me Stop..
i just Don't Think Kurse A.k.a Chino XL Jr is you Fam
Your Consistent Dood, you Gotta jus Keep At it.. I Think you've Found ur Style
Run With It .. Fuck It...

The Concepts Nice , Flow was On Point.. Brought More Depth To This Joint..
Still Like Why Its So Hard Better .. Maybe Cus It's My Favorite Joint By you.
Anyways Homie , Just Keep Doin you Don't Stop.. Keep Um Comin

lyrics was nice, good story
flow was pretty consistent
felt u rushed a few words to keep up wit the beat..
quality, was perfect...

overall, a pretty solid track my dood.

good shit
hook was catchy
Idea was real good

this is one that should go on ur CD

Def. showed Lyrical skills on here
like we discussed

keep doing ya thang

The quality was real good too.

Its the first time i hear one of the audios of a rapper in this site. It sounds good very well produced.

hah thats funny jesodist...because this is a rough draft. its not even mixed down yet. it can only get better from here. A.M.E.rica!

Who are you ? You do any audios? Or are you a fuckin Multie ?

hhah. im not a textee like lotta illest cats imma audiohead man... www.myspace.com/ko peep it

good shit, flow was ill, lyrics were nice, not much that i can say that hasn't been said, also good concept...