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okay took abit of time started writin this about a month ago
forgot about finished it today

just lookin fo feed

His style imploded fans to fabricate the story in which we must abrogate
immasculate the anguished hate,abjudicate his skeptic after fate
concentrate n calibrate,the aim to legislate these all these fakes
decelerate slow down or rennovate or get beaten till u expectorate
gettin u too hallucinate when ya shit comes out we'll have to lacerate
skills too much for you too handle mate or even operate u over dose
we need to oxygenate ure body make sure live so this is educational
creational facts skeptical but criminals believe in god we face'em all
my rhymes too abstract u under react get hit but it's only semi contact
i will give u time to retract what u said then get the fuck back
cus other wise u wont leave intact with a brain i'll subtract
from ya head like a tac from a drwaing board to be exact leats not transact
leave u compact in a suit case throw ya dead body in the lake
if u alive then u will ache leave u shaken like an earthquake
god for saken in a worse state i take what i want lets demonstrate
lets not mistake me for a loser for sake just for u too intake
i'll leave u desercrated changes slightly like u syncopated
this is unexaggerated i have been hated discriminated
u all violated i'll leave u high pupils still dialated
on an unrealated-note leave u unheard of like an uninflated-quote
when i spun-to-take-the-slow i won-the-hate-of-those
who aint done-the-wait-of-growth lyrically abundance-of-flows
i'm stunnin-these-hoes who think they all great runnin-these-shows
if the truth comes to truth i'm the one-in-control

feed will be returned

shit read nice, a few barz were a lil forced...you were trying to hard tah use big words that some didn't make sense!



shit was nice...better then reading bout gangs and guns!



Keep at it hoommmie!

it was aiight dawg..there were a few places where the flow got pinballed
but after listening to your audio I kinda get your flow...
the big words were big..I'm not a fan, but you only 12 so actually your vocab is off the hook..all in all a good read..keep droppin..homie

thanks fo the feed dudes

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Good to finally read some nice Vocab up in this bitch!!
I like it a lot man.

"we need to oxygenate ure body make sure live so this is educational
creational facts skeptical but criminals believe in god we face'em all
my rhymes too abstract u under react get hit but it's only semi contact
i will give u time to retract what u said then get the fuck back "

Ill man. I loved it.

i dug this flow, very well used vocabulary

liked the verse you went off on the "ate" rhymin that showed skill

nice drop


peace

thanks for the feed dudes

not a clue what 80% of them words meant, not a fuckin clue..
but it sounded good...i guess lol...

i'm guessin there was alotta people who didnt understand it
but thanks fo the feed

You are wrong some of these fags are not very well educated and dont have a degree like me. But i read your shit took time to think about it.
Pretty good some parts were very deep lil imagery here and there. Nice multies great job. Punches here and there too. Like quix said a lil forced line here and there.

Dope drop homie the best i've seen from you.

You have great vocab. I think with all the words you pull out you can put alot more into your work. your structure could use work, maybe work on your flow a bit. but overall it was a nice read. keep it up man.

ite thinks dudes for the feed