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Here we go.

The bottle's upright, my conscience submerged in fluid/
Too drunk to fight, but still have the urge to do it/
Absurd and foolish, words are slurred but fluent/
Clenching my chest, thats where the hurt is rooted/
So much pain in life, is there a purpose to it/
Took a bite out of crime but never learned to chew it/
Tried to live legit but I'm too immature and stupid/
Always looking for love but never referred to Cupid/
Alcoholism turned me disturbed and putrid/
I heard of Jesus, but always thought church was useless/
So I confided in a man named Captain Morgan/
We'd stay up laughing all night and chat til mornin'/
He used to make me sick but I broke the habit/
Made me wonder how my life turned so dramatic/
Why do I feel this way, is it post traumatic?/
Or hopeless antics that my youth and growth established?/
Wish I could rip my heart out and throw shit at it/
Cause drinking seems to be the only way I can cope with sadness/
But where will I turn once this flask is dry?/
A social parasite, breaking this bottle would be fratricide/
A plague to any passerby, I advertise death/
An angel hovers towards me, I hand her my breath/
My brain is spinning, I'm over the limit/
I lay on the ground, let my eyes close for a minute/
I relax, feel my pulse growing faint/
I'm going numb like my soul was soaked in novacaine/
My throat rattles as I deflate my lungs/
No escape, its too late to retrace my plunge/

Damn, 13 views and not a single piece of feed? Uppin... don't sleep on this shit, this is just the beginning.

I dont know why no feed but, I think shit was dope..
I like that style of writing...and it's got a good flo to it..



Clenching my chest, thats where the hurt is rooted/
So much pain in life, is there a purpose to it/
Took a bite out of crime but never learned to chew it/
Tried to live legit but I'm too immature and stupid/
Always looking for love but never referred to Cupid/
Alcoholism turned me disturbed and putrid/
I heard of Jesus, but always thought church was useless

^^^^this was my favorite link in it..the rest was good but I felt this most^^^


of course keep droppin...

damn this would make a good audio. the flow was absolutley perfect imo. the content was their too.

Alcoholism turned me disturbed and putrid/
I heard of Jesus, but always thought church was useless/
So I confided in a man named Captain Morgan/
We'd stay up laughing all night and chat til mornin'/
^^^^
lol i liked the Captain Morgan line. that shit was clever.

thanks for the feed, bump for more

That first rhyme scheme was mad hot.

No filler, no forced multies, all from the heart... this is a deep one.

I love the use of "fratricide".

Never knew there was a such word, but it's definitely a creative way of calling the bottle your brother.

He used to make me sick but I broke the habit/
Made me wonder how my life turned so dramatic/
Why do I feel this way, is it post traumatic?/
Or hopeless antics that my youth and growth established?/
Wish I could rip my heart out and throw shit at it/
Cause drinking seems to be the only way I can cope with sadness/

^^^again with that impeccable flow and rhyme scheme.

top notch drop man... keep at it.

Yes Sir...

Loved this

The fratricide lines kills.. the Throw shit at it was nice...
Liked the Church line and i liked the novicane line.
and the last line about cant undo the jump was nice.


But this Post is Tame shit Compared to the Ruck i know..

I think u need to givem Another

that's straight up legit!

Can I get some moar?

bumpin some oldies

This is sick, like a few said before there were no kinks in the flow whatsoever. Personal drop of course and you showed good emotion especially in the line where you wrote about ripping your heart out. Very good perspective shown I could totally see where you were coming from the whole way through, and the multis were rock steady. Keep at it.

My favourite lines:

Took a bite out of crime but never learned to chew it/

So I confided in a man named Captain Morgan/
We'd stay up laughing all night and chat til mornin'/

Wish I could rip my heart out and throw shit at it/ < hit hardest imo.
Cause drinking seems to be the only way I can cope with sadness/

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