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its evolution, cuz survival is a contest..
its execution when our rivals make some progress,
no restitution, they jus take what we got left
and it don't matter who we hurt in the process,
"mercy? remorse? I never heard of that nonsense"
drowned in our laughter are the words of our conscious
and its only human for us to love all the conflicts...
find a solution and it makes us feel accomplished..
but we lost our way, we need to find a compass.
we need to find love, god bless the birth of that concept,
and good luck in the persuit of that object
everybody loves life, so they hatin' to stop death..
its like they got an immortality complex...
but it's simple to me, their reality's off-set.
lay ya hard heads on God's chest and take a long rest..
He's singing a lullaby, just as I've gone deaf.

"damn.... where'd erryone go?"

~~~

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uuuupppppppppinnnnn dis bitch

I thought this was ill son!
First 4 lines had a sick rhyme scheme to it .
Good message and flow was on point.
Props .

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its evolution, cuz survival is a contest..
its execution when our rivals make some progress,
no restitution, they jus take what we got left
and it don't matter who we hurt in the process,

^^^ thats just ill!

thanks man.

this one i put some mental effort into.

for some reason im not completely satisfied with it though...

yep this was nice. u can tell u put some thought into it. like Raiza said the verse started off real strong. kinda hit the nail on the head with a couple statements

its evolution, cuz survival is a contest..
its execution when our rivals make some progress,



this bar through me off a bit tho. probably coz u switched the rhymes up a little.

and its only human for us to love all the conflicts...
find a solution and it makes us feel accomplished..

the rest of the verse was straight. some good concepts. i wasnt too keen on the abrupt ending. i woulda maybe made it a bit longer but u did well to get that far with the rhyme scheme.

as for the rhyme scheme changing, it's how i would pronounce it in audio.. slowly evolving the rhyme.. non-sense.. conscious, conflicts, accomplish. the abrupt ending is like... an expression of how quick violence grows out of control.. before we know it it's too late to change anything

uppin

nice drop dawg shit was small but i thought it was good keep droppin

uppin it... as i take a couple hits... of yet another spliff... aint a guitar hero but im trippin off the rift