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My lifestyle has jus gone out of style..
And so I die like a bad fashion.
Sorry, Joker, I'm all out of smiles,
So all the while,
I go on with my laughin'.

Some would call me a madman..
Wrapped up in genius delusions,
I call them Pac-Man;
Eating my ghosts, chasing my illusion.

For I am abnormal,
Though the paranormal goes unproven,
For what is a Holy Spirit,
But an unholy nuisance?

It cannot be measured,
Though the instruments try.
It can't be defined,
So the scientist lies..

The truth at his eyes..
"How can I be blind?"
And under such pressures,
for the answer, He died.

So he wandered,
And looked to the otherside.
while some ponder..
"When will his Ghost return,
to tell us what he finds?"

It's nice to see someone on here who can write poetry, In all honesty I was surprised lol.

Nice structure, nice concept, nice story.

You started off really strong, I'd say the first stanza if definitely my favourite bit. It wasn't as strong throughout the middle, but you still got your point across without losing it or having to force it too much. The closing stanza was good, but it wasn't as strong as it could have been.

All in all, good job dude. Welcome to illest.

thnx. It's been a while since I've written poetry. I started out a poet, then transitioned to rap, but it's definitely helped me alot in terms of flow and rhyme scheme.

The ending bar is an emphasis of the paradox.

People assume he actually went to the otherside, although he never returned to prove it.

"For I am abnormal,
Though the paranormal goes unproven,
For what is a Holy Spirit,
But an unholy nuisance?

It cannot be measured,
Though the instruments try.
It can't be defined,
So the scientist lies.."

Are my fav parts in ur poem.
Its good to see more poets joining.
Welcome to the site bro.

Props on the poem