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Jesodist

Posted: Fri Dec 12, 2008 5:48 pm
by Jesodist
I lived in your hood drove slow through it everyday without
tint on my 'windows',
Still got my watch, didn't hear any shots, I guess it's
just the way the wind 'blows'

See, I am the Quarterback that picks apart your
'Defense'
the one that hands you the rock to run with…the
owner of the 'sequence'

the reaper waiting for you in the 'bend'
the freeze, that slows the liquid to your brain 'stem'
and put a stop to the flow that leaks from your 'pen'

Sick with it like Pacquiao strapped with 10
'ounces '
similar to ekoms when i start to 'rumble'
and underground like dirt trees smuggled in tunnels so 'subtle'
King of the 'jungle'
pull a string, undue your
'bundle'
travel through your thoughts like a train in a
'tunnel'
lyrically injecting knowledge in your brain like my words were a
'funnel'
one shot one kill hard pills laced with steel
'thoughts'
snipe you from 'hilltops'
don't confuse me with
this country's usual 'crops'
my freestyle's choke and stiffen your brain in the
'spot'
leave it twisted like wires after a plier
'knot'
mentality similar to Asama when i am devising a
'plot'
its not a 'flop' i show what i 'got'
my aim is sharp you find it imposible to deflect this
'shot'
and finally the truth is the truth whether you believe or
'not'




Mixing with Classic. Leave yo feedback brothers you all know who you are.

Posted: Fri Dec 12, 2008 6:11 pm
by TreTru
what can I say? It's tight to me..I feel that style actually
pretty sick flo..Rappable nice transfer throughout


it's good to be diverse and some might disagree but I was actually feeling
this.

"the reaper waiting for you in the 'bend'
the freeze, that slows the liquid to your brain 'stem'
and put a stop to the flow that leaks from your 'pen' "

^^^classic type flo not packed with multis...so fukn what If you tracked it
it would be sick..

anyways please keep em coming cause it doesn't seem to active lately..
stay up..

Posted: Fri Dec 12, 2008 6:16 pm
by Jesodist
Thanks for the feed bro. What do you mean it doesnt seem too active lately ?
i you mean i dont battle a lot its because people dont wanna battle me.
If you mean me dropping scriptures i dont want to really drop a lot caz people dont give me enough feedback or even say that they read it.

Posted: Fri Dec 12, 2008 6:27 pm
by TreTru
that's what I mean,I dont think as many people are actually
looking at it this week, as last week.cause I been checking back and forth yesterday and today and most of the views are from me..and me you and
mutual hostility are the most active in these forums lately..

Posted: Fri Dec 12, 2008 9:35 pm
by TheCh3mist
was an aigh drop homie, nothin really wowed me on here, no hate, but was solid, flow was koo n shit, just coulda uesd a lil harder punches/metas in there, and your structure could be a lil smoother too, but was koo though, keep spittin bruh, 1..

Posted: Sat Dec 13, 2008 2:28 pm
by Jesodist
No bro this was no battle so i didnt include punches i mainly focused on making readers think what i am trying to imply with my lines but i guess they just read and dont understand what the lines are trying to say. Its a deep scripts with meanings behind everyline people just dont get it yet. Thanks for the feed bro.

Posted: Sat Dec 13, 2008 3:05 pm
by Brah-Vo
All in all, i liked it. It was smooth, simple and effective.
But at times it got abit TOO simple. Ive seen your other stuff and it's much more complex.
Nothing wrong with this piece though and i still enjoyed reading it.
ups.

Posted: Mon Dec 29, 2008 10:10 pm
by Jesodist
Thanks for the feed rai sounds like an honest feed bro.
Respect.

Posted: Mon Dec 29, 2008 10:51 pm
by Time Line
this is some good shit Jeso, spunds kinda basic, but if you try to understand and not just read, there is a meaning inside your lines, keep it up cuzz.

Posted: Tue Dec 30, 2008 3:02 am
by - Mutual -
yeah this is unique
has a real flow to it
good read
keep'em comin

Posted: Tue Dec 30, 2008 8:07 am
by MagicMark
yeah this was unusual lol

flow was cool... no real topic.. but a decent piece..

kept me interested throughout the piece

a basic understanding of how to use multis.. some where a little basic, and i would also work on rewording punches..

overall- decent shiz..

Posted: Tue Dec 30, 2008 12:11 pm
by Jesodist
Damn thanks for the feed guys appreciate the love.
comments like these makes me wanna drop more.
i'll drop some shit later.

Posted: Tue Dec 30, 2008 12:33 pm
by Borat
you had some nice rhyme schemes throughout this, some bars were stretched but you made it work.

"and underground like dirt trees smuggled in tunnels so 'subtle'
King of the 'jungle'"

haha I like this. tight style

"one shot one kill hard pills laced with steel
'thoughts'"

dosn't make much sense to me but it sounds tight.

keep writing dog.

Posted: Tue Dec 30, 2008 8:28 pm
by Jesodist
it shoulda been thoughts of steel my bad bro. Glad you liked those lines i like to stay on topic bro and drop my best shit in scriptures that way everyone reads it caz battles are arranged like election polls.
Thanks for the feed Rip

anyone else?