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I wrote my own verision of The Game'z old track..... im thinkin about recording it still.. i dunno wat chall think?


Ok itz time agian,
to get back to rhymen en,
doin wat i love,weather its off my mind, or from tha pen
spitt this shit from my heart,this is me, no manikenz,
but chall wont believe in me, so i believe in fuck a friend!
i dont care, i dunn need you,me and u'z irrelivant,
only i can take me far,strive for my intelligence,
unlock tha skills i have inside,is exactly what my mind intendz,
i wanna make my dreamz come true,why should i only pretend,
i got to be better than you,this is more than just a trend
stupid dances,silly hookz is sumthin i dont comprehend,
i spit that realness with a meaning even seein rap is dead
Rest In Peace,but not forever,ill bring you back and ressurect,
hip hops greatest treasure,they unleashed me out tha chest,
im shinen brighter than u ever seen im beemin none tha less,
yall haterz dont wanna see me or even hear me on a track,
but im determend to make yall feel me,come on dj, bring that back,
have some faith and trust in me, i promise to deliver wax,
wit tha illest spitten lyricz,wackness is just what i lack,
consume your heart with my ryhmez,sufferin from rap attackz,
holy ghost'n throuh ya headfones, ill trap ya spirit in my rapz....


Hey now its verse two,
here to bring you somethin new,
but thats kind of hard to do,
when yall dont wanna see tha truth,
yall into souljia boy and do his little dances too,
then say tha south is hott,all i hear is silly fools,
when they do spitt that fiyah, its only from a chosin few,
i dont wanna be like that,spitt like u, I Refuse!
Rap is my life,its a race,so dont tripp my moves,
try and deny my place itz garanteed that u will lose,
U want beef, i got got my crew,u got ur squad its all on you,
i aint shook i wont back down,not from any type of dude,
recorrect our rap game is the only choice to choose,
no one else will take tha stand,so instead i jumped and flew...


Damn rite its verse three,
this here is my dream,
yall wanna cloud that up,then ill bring tha lightening
strike all haterz gone,not a chance to fight me,
rain on you catz hard,drown u sumthin frightening
i will never let you stunt ,i will only smite thee,
you will all pay up,my emotionz far from free
underestimate tha chick, oh well u can bite me,
this is my destiny, my stop light iz bright green,
so wat if you dont like it,i stay cold like ice cream,
im like a bakerman,eat chall up wit frosting,
i dont care about yall disses,yall r not intising,
not aware of your wishes,yall dunn even like me!


yeah last verse waz weak but wateva, its wat was in my head at tha time...anywayz.... Holla At Cha Girl please.....ty

Bump

lol. okaaay???

anyone else?

I'll leave feed since no one wants to leave feed...

If you wanna work on lyricism.. work on multis..
and re-words better and more originally..
you're from New Yorker and you rap like you're from the south..
not good


Good point is.. i've heard you rap.. you're flow is ill and ya delivery is nice.. i've seen better drops from you.. but stick around and keep ya head up...also talk to kurse.. he knows alot about music..

This piece Was coo you Should start Usin Multis & messin With Wordplay More..
Other Then that,The Flow was Coo..& Meanin Seemed put into it...

Anyways keep Droppin

take it like uh slut!! ahh!!!!! ah!!!!!!!! take it u whore!!!!!!!!! awwwww i cum'd all ova U

im actually from boston..and i hate most south rapperz.... so eeew @ that other comment..lol


but for tha rest, thankz and thatz wats supp,, im not really much of a text head and wrote this to see if i wanted to record this,,,,but yuhh no doubt, i will be working on my multies and what not, i would love to try and battle some of yall dudez as soon as i stepp my game up a little....i can digg it,, thankz for tha feedback

to get back to rhymen en,
doin wat i love,weather its off my mind, or from tha pen


rhymen en doin wat u love whether its off my mind or pen?.

if you could rearange ya phrase Pop that in as a Multii

Not bad..I personally like song writing style as opposed to text..but if your gonna battle in here you'll have to step it up..keep postin..


and Panda WTF?..stop bein such a hater.

aye Thank You my dude, i feel you