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jus sumin quick i'm tryna come back any feed is appreciated and will be returned if you leave a link or sum shit

i'm back-to-rap attack-the-slack hangin from me when i first sat-relaxed
a sack-of-facts got me trackin-gats now i'm a see i i can reach the max
a pack-of-mac lackin-mags got be jailed fo packin heat in my bag
so catch-the-stacks no match-for-plaques the truth taken like it's tax
so hatch-a-trap that patches-slaps cheer me up i'm way too sad
sad-of-spac rappers tryna rap-an-act jus shut up n sitback
i'll leave u clinically-broken-n-lyrically-hopin that u leave still copin
cus my memorys'-golden-the-felonies-stolen leave u dyin n cold then
shit it's spiritually-olden-hearin-me-spoken got arrested for holdin
haters-just-tokin marijuana creations-when-smokin detested n broken
am i elevated-or-rennovated guessed debated-or-calculated
inflated-n-desocrated demonstrated-or-appreciated deflated-an-jus-to-hated
cus u know u all full of the hate now u know that i made this

yeah like i said sumin quick i hope ya'll leave feed much appreciated

nice, i saw some good multis, saw from ur feedback that its ur favorite area, mine as well haha, there's about a good handful of people on here who can deliver multis like this, we should have a multi battle sometime lol should be fun, overall it was nice, couple parts that fell off at the endings where i thought the multis should've been but overall i'd give this a 7/10 strictly on multis

thanks fo the feed Koms n yeah it would be good havin a multi battle type shit could have sum great rhymes right there

i'm back-to-rap attack-the-slack hangin from me when i first sat-relaxed
a sack-of-facts got me trackin-gats now i'm a see i i can reach the max
a pack-of-mac lackin-mags got be jailed fo packin heat in my bag
so catch-the-stacks no match-for-plaques the truth taken like it's tax
so hatch-a-trap that patches-slaps cheer me up i'm way too sad
sad-of-spac rappers tryna rap-an-act jus shut up n sitback


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This seemed very basic to me nothing i havent heard just re worded different.
You had a Nice flow to it and some preey nice multies. Which i think you could of fixed up better.


i'll leave u clinically-broken-n-lyrically-hopin that u leave still copin
cus my memorys'-golden-the-felonies-stolen leave u dyin n cold then
shit it's spiritually-olden-hearin-me-spoken got arrested for holdin
haters-just-tokin marijuana creations-when-smokin detested n broken
am i elevated-or-rennovated guessed debated-or-calculated
inflated-n-desocrated demonstrated-or-appreciated deflated-an-jus-to-hated
cus u know u all full of the hate now u know that i made this


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Your flow was a bit choppy on this one all over the place. Keep practicing the multies are the best i rarely focus on punchlines.

thanks fo the feed dude i'll return the favour at sum point

You're getting better. Keep droppin.

yeah it's allright..you guys do alot of multi's wich is
what I been lacking so one on that..

but I had a hard time staying with the subject..IMO

It's rappable to a beat. you stayed in the pocket most of the time and I dig that..

your obviously buildin lyrical muscle so it wont take long...

thanks fo the feed Tre