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..( R.SON.aLL ).. wrote:[align=center]"i Hear Tha Dreams Start Talkin,
Might Be Comin From Where Mah Heart is .."

& everytime i would try to grab him to let go, he would say "Uh, and another one" & grew further ..
Away, i was tryna get a sign of some help, i start bleedin out tears, & was cryin for help ..
he dissappeared, i thought i died inside of tha welps
once i felt mah soul left outta mah body, & saw mahself, outside of mahself ..
i jumped right back into tha dream, everythin was in slow motion, tried to hit a nigga i couldn't reach for ..
Heartbeatin so fast, i could feel it thru mah t-shirt, seen tha Big nigga again, jumped off another cliff ..
Fell deeper ..
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it was all juss a dream"[/align]

My favorite drop of the tournament thus far. I thought the creativity was off the wall. You're quite the wordsmith when it comes to writing songs and should definitely attempt to write more. I thought this was almost as ill as that verse you had on the Harle collaboration.

may be jus me, but i wasnt feelin this...
mediocre lyrics...pretty simple imagery..
structure was mad hard to follow, esp with the run-on sentences..
no hate bro...

What scott is saying is understandable. If you aint used to this type of structure then you wont get it, but if u know how to follow it, it's dope.

Like plex said, creativity was off the hook, i dunno man but you make it look so easy. You got some imagery in there that i dont think anyone could think of, and it was a real enjoyable read,
Haven't read the other tourney pieces but this was dope man. mad props.

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fallin off a cliff, until a Big nigga grabbed me from tha clouds by tha coat tag,
"Yeah lil fanasty nigga, here's a dream you can scribble in ya notepad",
Tha right side of his face was gone, i think he was crossed in between two murders ..
& everytime i would try to grab him to let go, he would say "Uh, and another one" & grew further ..
Away, i was tryna get a sign of some help, i start bleedin out tears, & was cryin for help ..
he dissappeared, i thought i died inside of tha welps
once i felt mah soul left outta mah body, & saw mahself, outside of mahself ..




So Damn ill...
I Thought These Lines Had a Echo Effect..
LoL...

This Was Dope...

thought the imagery was pretty cool on this piece, lyrics was standard but the structure caught me out. probably me but i just couldnt get the shit to flow.

^.. if i Was to Speak it Out ..
U`ll Be amazed ..
it`s Real Nice ..
But i Appreciate it ..

Shit was Allright.....nothing special at all. I know how to follow this style and i still thought the Flow was below average. Mediocore Copntent....imagery was above average. But overall i'd have to say this piece wasn't very affective.


Took off slow.....liked the last lil bar there. But the whole middle was just like I ask him...blah blah blah....he told me....blaha lah lah!.....This of course is only MY OPPINION!




Bump!