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I'm Outstanding Like Homeless People...Read Why...

Posted: Sun Nov 30, 2008 6:19 pm
by ScottJames
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Umm, Class Is Now In Session..Children Take Ur Seats..

Its Scott James Dude I Pop Lames, Straight ABUSE-U-WHORES..
Cuz I Gotchu "Runnin From The Screen" Like "COMPUTER-CORDS"!!
Fresh Lines Never USED-BEFORE, See, Im The GREATEST-AMERICAN..
While Yall Couldnt Have A "Nice Opener" Doin "PLAYS-WIT-SAMARITANS"!!
My Dopeness I INHERITED Im Scarin Kids Plus U BASTARDS-FAKE..
Cuz EveryOne On Illest Lyrics I "Wil-Son" Like "CASTAWAY"!!
Cover U In MASKIN-TAPE!! Then Slice n Jab My KNIFE-IN-YA-SPINE..
So I Can "Dial Up Your Soul" And Put Ya "LIFE-ON-THE-LINE"!!
Im NICE-WIT-THE-RHYMES!! So Wake Up As I SMACK-U-BITCHES..
Screw David Blaine, Ill "Fuck U Tricks Up" Like A "BAD-MAGICIAN"!!
U LADS-IM-DISSIN Plus Ya RAPS-IS-MISSIN, No Way U Can SEE-SCOTT..
Ya PIECE-POPS? PLEASE-OCK Only "Pumps Yall Pumpin" Are Ya REEBOKS!!
Spittin HEAT-ROCK!! Hall Of Fame- An Im Only On My SEVENTH-BAR..
Imma Make This "Mark Echo" Like The "Graffti Artist Held A SEMINAR"!!
Ive Always BEEN-IN-CHARGE..See Im "Hot + Sick" Like "ILL-MODELS"..
N Imma "Press Down n Twist Ya Top Off" Like Opening A "PILL-BOTTLE"!!
So Listen Up Im The Most NOBLE,-WARNING U Of This COASTAL-STORMING..
When My Flows Drop Im "So Hot" That Im The Cause Of "GLOBAL-WARMING"!!
Yall Hoes Are Boring.. Ya NEED-STYLE Take A SEAT-WHILE I FREE-WILD..
U Lack Image, U Couldnt "Tell A Vision" If U Had "Ms.Cleo On SPEED-DIAL"!!
Have Ya BLEED-PILES!! While My Lines Are A "Hoot" Like An "OWL-CRY"..
N Its Like U "Shootin Free Throws".. Spittin Nuttin But "FOUL-LINES"!!
I ASTOUND-MINDS.. So Get The Extinguisher Cuz Im Known To SPARK-FLAMES-OCK..
Plus "Film Decoration Auctions" The Only Time Ya "BAR-GAINS-PROPS"(Bargain)!!
Say Ock.. I Got Perfect Verses.. While Yall Easy To Beat Like SKANK-HOES..
Ya RANK-LOW So Wit Ease Ill Leave U "Pussys Fucked On The Go" Like "BANG-BROS"!!
My GANG-STROLLS Wit BANK-ROLLS U SLANG-DOPE? Bitch Please. I THINK-I..
Will SINK-GUYS, Then Leave Ya Body Bleedin Till Ya "See Red" Like "PINK-EYE"!!
My Fists? Youll SEEK-MINE!! Dawg... Ya "Shit Blows" Like A "TIRD-BURSTIN"..
So Ill Leave Ya "Shot In Ya Back" Like Video Games In "3RD-PERSON"!!
U Da WORST-VERSION So No Need To Duck WHEN-YA-HAMMERZ-BLOW..
Cuz I Finna Be "Rollin Over Ya Bars" Like "INDIANA-JONES"!!
Im GIFTED-N-IT-SHOWS! Im Known 2 "Stop Hearts" Like Poppin A "BOTTLE-OF-PILLS"..
No STOPPIN-THIS-SKILL So "ILL On The Charts" Someone Toss Me A "HOSPITAL-BILL"!!
Imma BOSS-AN-I-KILL!! Ill "Spill Ya Mind" So I Can See Whatchu "THINKIN-ABOUT"..
Then Disintegrate Ya Body Till There "Aint Nun Left" Like The "EXTINCTION-OF-VOWS"!!
U STINKIN-UP-CROWDS!! So Watch As I SINK-IN-MY-TEETH To The PINK-IN-YA-MEAT...
As It "SLINKS-TO-YA-FEET" Its Proof That Now You Can Really "THINK-ON-YA-FEET"!!
I BEAT-THE-ELITE!! Im ROBBIN-N-THIEVIN Ya MAMAS-THE-REASON I Be BOBBIN-N-WEAVIN..
Wit Hottest Keys U Couldnt "Stop My Freeze" If U Was A "Police OFFICER-SQUEEZIN"!!
SCOTT-IS-THE-REASON!! Like Coke I WRECK-YER-BRAINS Like Construction I DECK-UR-FRAME..
Then X-YER-NAME Cuz Its James N Yes This "King Jumpin U" Like A Fuckin "CHECKERS-GAME"!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

God Damn..
Thats How Its Done Kids..
Class Dismissed..

Re: I'm Outstanding Like Homeless People...Read Why...

Posted: Sun Nov 30, 2008 6:31 pm
by complexity
ScottJames wrote:.
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Umm, Class Is Now In Session..Children Take Ur Seats..

Its Scott James Dude I Pop Lames, Straight ABUSE-U-WHORES..
Cuz I Gotchu "Runnin From The Screen" Like "COMPUTER-CORDS"!!

Nice punch....

Fresh Lines Never USED-BEFORE, See, Im The GREATEST-AMERICAN..
While Yall Couldnt Have A "Nice Opener" Doin "PLAYS-WIT-SAMARITANS"!!

Cool punch

My Dopeness I INHERITED Im Scarin Kids Plus U BASTARDS-FAKE..
Cuz EveryOne On Illest Lyrics I "Wil-Son" Like "CASTAWAY"!!

A bit simple.

Cover U In MASKIN-TAPE!! Then Slice n Jab My KNIFE-IN-YA-SPINE..
So I Can "Dial Up Your Soul" And Put Ya "LIFE-ON-THE-LINE"!!

Great concept.

Im NICE-WIT-THE-RHYMES!! So Wake Up As I SMACK-U-BITCHES..
Screw David Blaine, Ill "Fuck U Tricks Up" Like A "BAD-MAGICIAN"!!

Fuck them David Blaine punchlines.

U LADS-IM-DISSIN Plus Ya RAPS-IS-MISSIN, No Way U Can SEE-SCOTT..
Ya PIECE-POPS? PLEASE-OCK Only "Pumps Yall Pumpin" Are Ya REEBOKS!!

Nah.

Spittin HEAT-ROCK!! Hall Of Fame- An Im Only On My SEVENTH-BAR..
Imma Make This "Mark Echo" Like The "Graffti Artist Held A SEMINAR"!!

Decent.

Ive Always BEEN-IN-CHARGE..See Im "Hot + Sick" Like "ILL-MODELS"..
N Imma "Press Down n Twist Ya Top Off" Like Opening A "PILL-BOTTLE"!!

I've heard a few spins on that line, but it was cool.

So Listen Up Im The Most NOBLE,-WARNING U Of This COASTAL-STORMING..
When My Flows Drop Im "So Hot" That Im The Cause Of "GLOBAL-WARMING"!!

Good line.

Yall Hoes Are Boring.. Ya NEED-STYLE Take A SEAT-WHILE I FREE-WILD..
U Lack Image, U Couldnt "Tell A Vision" If U Had "Ms.Cleo On SPEED-DIAL"!!

Creative, but the punch didn't make enough sense.

Have Ya BLEED-PILES!! While My Lines Are A "Hoot" Like An "OWL-CRY"..
N Its Like U "Shootin Free Throws".. Spittin Nuttin But "FOUL-LINES"!!

Probably a little bit played, but nice.

I ASTOUND-MINDS.. So Get The Extinguisher Cuz Im Known To SPARK-FLAMES-OCK..
Plus "Film Decoration Auctions" The Only Time Ya "BAR-GAINS-PROPS"(Bargain)!!

The wordplay was slick.

Say Ock.. I Got Perfect Verses.. While Yall Easy To Beat Like SKANK-HOES..
Ya RANK-LOW So Wit Ease Ill Leave U "Pussys Fucked On The Go" Like "BANG-BROS"!!

Yah, I like that.

My GANG-STROLLS Wit BANK-ROLLS U SLANG-DOPE? Bitch Please. I THINK-I..
Will SINK-GUYS, Then Leave Ya Body Bleedin Till Ya "See Red" Like "PINK-EYE"!!

Haha.

My Fists? Youll SEEK-MINE!! Dawg... Ya "Shit Blows" Like A "TIRD-BURSTIN"..
So Ill Leave Ya "Shot In Ya Back" Like Video Games In "3RD-PERSON"!!

Good punch.

U Da WORST-VERSION So No Need To Duck WHEN-YA-HAMMERZ-BLOW..
Cuz I Finna Be "Rollin Over Ya Bars" Like "INDIANA-JONES"!!

Woah.

Im GIFTED-N-IT-SHOWS! Im Known 2 "Stop Hearts" Like Poppin A "BOTTLE-OF-PILLS"..
No STOPPIN-THIS-SKILL So "ILL On The Charts" Someone Toss Me A "HOSPITAL-BILL"!!

Alright.

Imma BOSS-AN-I-KILL!! Ill "Spill Ya Mind" So I Can See Whatchu "THINKIN-ABOUT"..
Then Disintegrate Ya Body Till There "Aint Nun Left" Like The "EXTINCTION-OF-VOWS"!!

Not feeling this.

U STINKIN-UP-CROWDS!! So Watch As I SINK-IN-MY-TEETH To The PINK-IN-YA-MEAT...
As It "SLINKS-TO-YA-FEET" Its Proof That Now You Can Really "THINK-ON-YA-FEET"!!

I think you by mistake repeated a line there. The rhymes didn't work to your advantage or else, I have a feeling there is a real dope punchline missing there. Your brain sinks to street, think on your feet, something like that.

I BEAT-THE-ELITE!! Im ROBBIN-N-THIEVIN Ya MAMAS-THE-REASON I Be BOBBIN-N-WEAVIN..
Wit Hottest Keys U Couldnt "Stop My Freeze" If U Was A "Police OFFICER-SQUEEZIN"!!

Decent.

SCOTT-IS-THE-REASON!! Like Coke I WRECK-YER-BRAINS Like Construction I DECK-UR-FRAME..
Then X-YER-NAME Cuz Its James N Yes This "King Jumpin U" Like A Fuckin "CHECKERS-GAME"!!

Ill.
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

God Damn..
Thats How Its Done Kids..
Class Dismissed..
Overall...A few mediocre rhymes and punchlines, but overall it came off as a strong piece.

Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 1:51 am
by Ambiguous Realm
im not gonna break this down like dickhead over here lol, couple puns i've seen or used before, others i haven't, multies were alright, this was mainly consistent punchlines, wordplay was eh, the flow was pretty good, last bar was my favorite with the king james reference, think one part i would've worded differently for more consistent multies but that's just cuz im an addict when it comes to it, anyways overall it was pretty good, another dope drop

Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 4:01 am
by Haz
This was nice Overrall
Seemed Like your Weren't Goin To Stop LOL
Only Thang is The Pill Bottle Line.. Is Played..

And This Shit jus Had Me Laughin ..

Cuz I Gotchu "Runnin From The Screen" Like "COMPUTER-CORDS"!!
Fresh Lines Never USED-BEFORE

It Made me Laugh Ca1use U said 'Never Used before'

Eagles Back Is Full Of Pig Skin Like A Neutered Boar
Ill Leave You |Running From The Screen| Like A Computer Chord

LOL^ some Cat From Anotha site...
It Was pretty Similar, Thought That Was your Only Flaw in the Verse
Anyways Pretty Tight All around
Keep It up

Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 6:19 am
by ScottJames
...and then Haz has to shoot my confidence down!!
lol jp

maan, i thought i had some fresh wordplay on that line!!!

okay well, fresh lines never used before IMO

:)

haha

Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 6:23 am
by Ambiguous Realm
yea.. technically almost every wordplay and punchline ever used in text that's indirect towards anyone has probably been used before..pretty sure we all write it fresh off the top and then later find out someone else said somethin similar, many minds think alike

Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 1:34 pm
by Haz
It Was a Overall Hot Verse though

Posted: Thu Dec 04, 2008 1:40 am
by ScottJames
^agreed :)

Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 5:51 am
by - Mutual -
it was pretty dope overall
nice puns and punches
the flow i couldnt really get
keep'em comin

Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 6:31 am
by HKX
hot shit nigga shit was nice gotta agree wit da rest of em keep droppin kid

Posted: Sat Dec 06, 2008 2:48 am
by Glamtrash
I'd like to see more from you, this was pretty good. Keep droppin.

Posted: Sat Dec 06, 2008 3:32 am
by ScottJames
^theres two more on the 2nd page if ya wanna peep..

Posted: Sat Dec 06, 2008 11:50 am
by TreTru
class in session:
nahh that was hott kid. I'm feelin that.I get most of the rhythm theres only a few sections i had to double take.
ohhh
- Ya "Shit Blows" Like A "TIRD-BURSTIN"..
So Ill Leave Ya "Shot In Ya Back" Like Video Games In "3RD-PERSON"!! -
----now that's sick.

that's some crazy word play, alot of metaphors too a whole lot
my personal style is a little more straight forward so I wouldn't
have done so many metaphors but in this freestyle, and battle forums that will KO som nikkuz no doubt..

Posted: Sat Dec 06, 2008 3:53 pm
by ScottJames
..thats the whole point, im a battler
the KO King...the punchline prince
aka beta for a metaphor

Posted: Sat Dec 06, 2008 6:52 pm
by ÐÛÇ£»
LoL You're Outstanding Like Pedophiles with this drop

pretty dope...a couple of used/played concepts

Example: the Wil-Son Line..

Overall it was a good read..

Lol you on some TheGuyYouHate tip with that pink font lol