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I''m baack...

and...

Your in Trouble Dun, cuz I''m Subtle Son! when i Muzzle Gunz
have you Guzzle Cum! then watch you ''Stick to the streets'' like Bubble gum
ain''t buying weed, i fuckin Stole My Cush cuz i''m Cold like Bush!
Out of this world and i''m ''Over the top'' like a Goal Line Push
Stop, I got Glockz Popping yah Grapez, lock & loaded droping the Fakes!
i''m Topping the Greatz! when i ''show you the curtain'' like SHopping for Drapes
so dangereous i got dah Crookz Shaking i make it look Blatent!
then took Bacon(money)! cuz dah strap ''Protects me from beef'' like a Cooks Apron!
Quix fell off....??
listen to these Lyerz Start; i insist you Hire Gaurdz! before dah Fire Sparkz!
you loving Quix! well yah ''Should n yah would'' cuz i''d be ''Good for yah Hood'' like Hybird Carz
i''ll Shoot a faggot! why not? i HArm Pilgrims disregard Burdons!
so Start dah Darn Curtain! cuz when it come to shotz!! i ''Sling More'' than Arm Surgeons
I''m a Thinking Mobtsa; clip dah lama if you Bringing Drama!
I''m Thugging Dog! while you kids ''Rush-in Shots'' like like Drinking Vodka!

Quix wrote:I''m baack...

and...

Your in Trouble Dun, cuz I''m Subtle Son! when i Muzzle Gunz
have you Guzzle Cum! then watch you ''Stick to the streets'' like Bubble gum
ain''t buying weed, i fuckin Stole My Cush cuz i''m Cold like Bush!
Out of this world and i''m ''Over the top'' like a Goal Line Push
Stop, I got Glockz Popping yah Grapez, lock & loaded droping the Fakes!
i''m Topping the Greatz! when i ''show you the curtain'' like SHopping for Drapes
so dangereous i got dah Crookz Shaking i make it look Blatent!
then took Bacon(money)! cuz dah strap ''Protects me from beef'' like a Cooks Apron!
Quix fell off....??
listen to these Lyerz Start; i insist you Hire Gaurdz! before dah Fire Sparkz!
you loving Quix! well yah ''Should n yah would'' cuz i''d be ''Good for yah Hood'' like Hybird Carz
i''ll Shoot a faggot! why not? i HArm Pilgrims disregard Burdons!
so Start dah Darn Curtain! cuz when it come to shotz!! i ''Sling More'' than Arm Surgeons
I''m a Thinking Mobtsa; clip dah lama if you Bringing Drama!
I''m Thugging Dog! while you kids ''Rush-in Shots'' like like Drinking Vodka!

Great punchline verse. My favorite punches were the bubble gum, the arm surgeon, and the curtain one.

The bubble gum was completely disgusting. I would think of a different way to phrase that.

There was a lot of excitement in this verse. I could tell you were feeling it.

You could become a little more effective with your filler from all the verses I've seen.

Overall, a 8.5/10

THANKS DUNNY ^