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I strike with the vision of ten Egyptians, writing inscriptions for this century
yet they don't mention me when it comes to vets, I elevated from sweat
and tears, I didn't become a threat overnight I got this success in years
I was told from the blessed, Ive got skill, a vet, to the rest I'm not still
some might guess, I lost will, Ive done my best to drop ill
the sun has yet to set, in the east, Ill always be hostile with the weapon of speech
I still have a second at least to step to my feet and reach where I'm destined to be
consecutively breaking records with record speeds when I wreck words effortlessly
the lesson for me is you don't get an executive sweet as a complex emcee
and fuck being famous, I don't need TV I already get my sex in the city free
i have no fantasy of being a rapper, girls already trying to put their hands on my chest
its in-stan-ity, I'm not saying I'm Drunken Jesus, I'm just a man in the flesh
who used lyrical tools and drew out the blueprint for the rest, to put the plan to the test
the question that's next is what will the birds do when I abandon the nest

I have regrets, but Ill never choose to cave like the dudes I slayed, the tools I played
its like chess sometimes i forget the wrong moves I made, Ive been booed on stage
when I was younger, I was consumed with rage, skipped school for days, drank booze and blazed
if you can use the phrase I went through the phase, that's how fools behave
I wasn't one of whom music saved, you know the fruit wearing them stupid shades
right? the foolish lame, who thinks he is cruel cuz he has the coolest name
I know you feel me, cuz I got flows, but really Ive been through the pot holes
traveled the empty road of lost souls, so out of control, rolled when i saw pac's ghost
i keep my profile low, but I want to show I've came up short on them long shot goals
been told, i was not dope, Ive been through home debacles, you know
when your families tempers flaring like hot coals, ur trying to get air in your nostrils
you were right, you'd swear it on gospels, every time you fight, the areas hostile
the skeletons in the closet don't compare to your embarrassing fossils
soon enough ur brought close until that affair that you caught, now you lost hope
on ur hot stove is a nice pot roast, you're going to go out and have ur own pot roast
on the block, post, watch close for cop coats as you smoke that top notch dope
acting all nice and kind, so you can get weed off folk, if life is a rhyme
mine is a god damn great hip hop quote, suicide, i've fought those thoughts
fighting my mind, was as easy as writing this line, I liken my time
on earth as Christ in his prime, I'm here to give advice and sight to the blind

(if you want feedback it would probably be a bad idea to not leave feed on this piece because I'm going to be dropping lots)

I Aint Seen You Drop Ina Minute.
This Piece Was Pretty Dope Though
like The Lifestyle In It.

I'm just a man in the flesh
who used lyrical tools and drew out the blueprint for the rest, to put the plan to the test
the question that's next is what will the birds do when I abandon the nest

I Like That Line^^^ It Plays Real Well Specially Since You've Created This Site And A Lot Of People Has Elevated A Lot Since They've Joined. That I've Noticed Anyway.

Good shit

Mac wrote:I Aint Seen You Drop Ina Minute.
This Piece Was Pretty Dope Though
like The Lifestyle In It.

I'm just a man in the flesh
who used lyrical tools and drew out the blueprint for the rest, to put the plan to the test
the question that's next is what will the birds do when I abandon the nest

I Like That Line^^^ It Plays Real Well Specially Since You've Created This Site And A Lot Of People Has Elevated A Lot Since They've Joined. That I've Noticed Anyway.

Good shit

I appreciate it along with all the other feedback.

just because your avy is Nas I couldn't help but read this and imagine him spitting every line. It seems to fit his style perfectly. The rhyme schemes, the flow, the lyrical content, everything. It definitely seems like something Nas would've written. It was dope though.

Yeh this was dope. Not too much complexity, or alot of lyrical excessiveness, just TRUTH!. Very nice flow wit some nice ass multi's. Just enjoy'd the passage of the piece. Def be HOT on audio! Keep this type of spit's up homie!

Flawless Flow Mos Deff ..
I Felt This Was Like a Lyrical Poem..
Multis Was Deff On Point.. Lines Connected Nicely , Transitions Weren't Bad..
A Few Punches Here & There.. But Your Substance Was Deff Up In This Piece
Nice To Have you In The Scripts...

when I was younger, I was super jade, skipped school for days, drank booze and blazed
if you can use the phrase I went through the phase, that's how fools behave

You Know you Did a Great Job Makin Havin Those Multi's jus Make Sense of the Bar...

Alot Of People Write Multis And Just write Them to Rhyme
your Multi's Go Together , String Togetha Words.... Deff Dope...

Honestly Plex , One Thing That Bothered Me Was The Last Few Lines
Felt you Rushed it , Come on Brotha.... You And I Both Know you Slacked Off a Little Bit.. And jus Wrote it To Fill in The Verse

Other Than Dat.. i'd Give this a 'ILL! DROP' Rank...

Keep It Plex .. Please Keep It Up My Nigga ...

This Shit Was Dope as Fuck Plex ..
But I've Seen Way Better From You ..
I Thought This Shit Was Finna Blow Mah Mind Like Usual ..
But it Kinda Grazed it ..
Anyways Nice Drop Son ..
The Closer Was Mos Deffo Killa ..
Ya Flow Was Soo Perfect Fam ..
Thas What I Love About ya Drops ..

Lets just say I agree with everyone and thanks for the feedback.

man dope piece right here dope punches came thro hot with multies sum dope lines

I have regrets, but Ill never choose to cave like the dudes I slayed, the tools I played
its like chess sometimes i forget the wrong moves I made, Ive been booed on stage
when I was younger, I was super jade, skipped school for days, drank booze and blazed
if you can use the phrase I went through the phase, that's how fools behave
I wasn't one of whom music saved, you know the fruit wearing them stupid shades
right? the foolish lame, who thinks he is cruel cuz he has the coolest name

that really stuck out 2 me^
keep'em comin plex

have regrets, but Ill never choose to cave like the dudes I slayed, the tools I played
its like chess sometimes i forget the wrong moves I made, Ive been booed on stage
when I was younger, I was super jade, skipped school for days, drank booze and blazed
if you can use the phrase I went through the phase, that's how fools behave

Sick... Deep!!

i agree with the Nas influance as well.. nice drop for sure.

this seems more like a keyed up verse by u considering i know wat its like to cypher with u

wont get into it so much, just gonna say nice drop, i enjoyed reading it

Ayo man, This piece of work right here is tight.
Someone above posted it sounded like as if Nas was spittin it.
Truth all the way here man. Keep it up

yeahh tha multis were well rhymed..
everything flowed...
a few dull moments in parts but not a lot



liked this

when your families tempers flaring like hot coals, ur trying to get air in your nostrils
you were right, you'd swear it on gospels, every time you fight, the areas hostile
the skeletons in the closet don't compare to your embarrassing fossils

Nice shit