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[font=Verdana]I've put this up on quite a few site's for different aspect's of feed & viewpoint's. Enjoy.

[align=center]Fairytales.
Written Wonders To Bivouac Borders. Books Binded By Passion & Present Philhellenic.
Greeks & Monks. Weeks & Months. Centuries Sudden. But Solemly Still Spellin' Scrips.
Bigotry In Bibles. Teror Of Torahs. Ko'ran Can Kill. Just A Convexed Chink On The Crystal.
Religion Literates The Library. & Our Stories Adapt From 1 Complex Clink Of A Chisel.
The Olds Gods Are Never More New. Smiles On Mars & Venus. Piecin' Possesive Pigments.
Orderin' Oracles. Oriphices Oculated. Ornaments Of Old. Over Leasin' Collective Shipments.
Zeus Is Vein. Violatin' Virtues. Verocious & Vocal. Slayin' That Shows Styles That Splinter.
Till That Tear Trails In The Threaten Of True Tales Thats Makin' The Rose Smile At Winter.
Sentences Value. Symbolic To Strips Of Gold. Placed In Plain Paper. But Still A Gift To Hold.
Rapid Read. & Sieve The Folds. Idolisin' Ideas Injected Irrationally Through Myths Of Old.
& Then Portrayed Patiently. To Pressure The Pen Periodically Potent In Punctured Penetration.
To Awe The Ages. Surprise The Sex's. As Languages Frozen For Cultured Entertainment.
Grey Rainbows. Colourin' Our Corneas Casually. & Airily Annex A Bold Neck With Swans.
Attack Alienated Areas. Adjectives Arc From Ax'd Articulate Aztecs From Golden To Bronze.
Emotion Enveloped Every Oxymoron. Orally On Objectives To Expand The Motile That's Rich.
As The Sun A Philospher. Heard Until The Moon Ventures A Vendetta & Remands A Total Eclipse.[/align]


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Sintakz wrote::roll:


[font=Verdana]I've put this up on quite a few site's for different aspect's of feed & viewpoint's. Enjoy.

[align=center]Fairytales.
Written Wonders To Bivouac Borders. Books Binded By Passion & Present Philhellenic.
Greeks & Monks. Weeks & Months. Centuries Sudden. But Solemly Still Spellin' Scrips.
Bigotry In Bibles. Teror Of Torahs. Ko'ran Can Kill. Just A Convexed Chink On The Crystal.
Religion Literates The Library. & Our Stories Adapt From 1 Complex Clink Of A Chisel.
The Olds Gods Are Never More New. Smiles On Mars & Venus. Piecin' Possesive Pigments.
Orderin' Oracles. Oriphices Oculated. Ornaments Of Old. Over Leasin' Collective Shipments.
Zeus Is Vein. Violatin' Virtues. Verocious & Vocal. Slayin' That Shows Styles That Splinter.
Till That Tear Trails In The Threaten Of True Tales Thats Makin' The Rose Smile At Winter.
Sentences Value. Symbolic To Strips Of Gold. Placed In Plain Paper. But Still A Gift To Hold.
Rapid Read. & Sieve The Folds. Idolisin' Ideas Injected Irrationally Through Myths Of Old.
& Then Portrayed Patiently. To Pressure The Pen Periodically Potent In Punctured Penetration.
To Awe The Ages. Surprise The Sex's. As Languages Frozen For Cultured Entertainment.
Grey Rainbows. Colourin' Our Corneas Casually. & Airily Annex A Bold Neck With Swans.
Attack Alienated Areas. Adjectives Arc From Ax'd Articulate Aztecs From Golden To Bronze.
Emotion Enveloped Every Oxymoron. Orally On Objectives To Expand The Motile That's Rich.
As The Sun A Philospher. Heard Until The Moon Ventures A Vendetta & Remands A Total Eclipse.[/align]


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And I quote...

I don't know what else to say?

Wft? hahaha. Uhhhhh thanks for the feed?

i posted a while ago main!!! your kidding right?


to be honest...this was a lil whack...putting random words together to make them Rhyme...and your larger words are often used out of context making it a HUGE STRETCH!!!!




imo!

I understand what you're sayin'. If I don't understand thing's & i'm about to get my ass kick'd, I'd hate on piece's that wer outta my IQ range too. It's ok.

Sintakz wrote:Wft? hahaha. Uhhhhh thanks for the feed?

And I quote is a compliment.

Got you homie lol. If you're baffled. It's mainly an idea (with me bein' an atheist) how religion (represent'd through each own's book) through the age's has changed the action's of nature. Pretty complex, but aint had 1 person get that right haha.

Ayo Sin. Dont mind the haters yo. Your pretty good man. You have the vocab down. Work on more substance.

I liked it nonetheless tho

Sentences Value. Symbolic To Strips Of Gold. Placed In Plain Paper. But Still A Gift To Hold.
Rapid Read. & Sieve The Folds. Idolisin' Ideas Injected Irrationally Through Myths Of Old.


feelin this bar...thoa either this verse was entirely over my head, or it was really wack...LoL... i dint know what 1/2 them words meant, and imma pretty educated dude...

but it was well written nonetheless...

Appreciated dude, leave links & i'll get at them.

i can relate to a lot of wat u said as far as the religious portions of it, there were a few awkward parts that seemed like typos or grammar errors but either way it was a decent read, seemed more like a poetic piece then rap even tho it had multies in it, only thing i didn't like was how stretched the lines were, i felt like it lessened the flow, few inner multies here n there but a few more could've been thrown in without decreasing the complex wordchoice

overall i'd give it a 7/10, thought it was pretty good