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A.S.A.P

Posted: Sun Nov 02, 2008 12:47 am
by thaphantom
What am I to do, Haven't wrote in a minute.
Everything to you, They'll hope that he did this.
I haven't Did shit, I'm unsure what my topics about.
I'm just writtin out of what's comin out of my mouth.
All you haters keep runnin ya mouth, Hi haters.
You can come at me laugh now and die later.
You could lie straighter, Put you under my feet.
Or you could be in defeat, under a mask in ye sleep.
Unsure what i mean i'm talkin bout a breathin machine.
Leave you stiffer then a manakin dummy.
Ok dummy?
Who really cares what you think.
Do this shit ASAP like T.I And you're the IT that will stink.
Chop you up like lunch meat, No one can find you now.
They're like what happened and how.

Haven't wrote in a minute honestly been doin my school work. leave some comments on this. hate if u want it dont matter anymore. Peace- SP-

Posted: Thu Nov 06, 2008 11:26 am
by precise
well its pretty basic to be honest, keep practicin

All you haters keep runnin ya mouth, Hi haters.
You can come at me laugh now and die later.

^^ lol that bar was funny at least, so u get some entertainment points

Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2008 7:35 am
by Def-init
It rhymed atleast.
Fav bar in your drop

"Chop you up like lunch meat, No one can find you now.
They're like what happened and how. "

Your drop makes me feel that you could have added more to each of your barz.
Like the flow was on point but it came accross as a very vague piece.

Keep the drops coming man, I aint sleepin on yeah but you could elaborate more in your pieces.

just my 2 cents. Peace!

Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2008 8:15 am
by thaphantom
Thanks for yall comments on it. anyone else wants to go ahead. havent really wrote in awhile trying to get back in it. i need to get out some of this tension should be dropping some audio's once i get my laptop. should get it around december. i've been producin and shit. so you'll get a taste of audio and my production soon. yeah i coulda elaborated more. but i was in school shoulda been doing work. and teacher was annoying me. yeah rhymes seem basic. but alot of people rap about nothing now-a-days. like non-sense type rappers.

Re: A.S.A.P

Posted: Wed Nov 19, 2008 6:41 am
by complexity
thaphantom wrote:What am I to do, Haven't wrote in a minute.
Everything to you, They'll hope that he did this.
I haven't Did shit, I'm unsure what my topics about.
I'm just writtin out of what's comin out of my mouth.
All you haters keep runnin ya mouth, Hi haters.
You can come at me laugh now and die later.
You could lie straighter, Put you under my feet.
Or you could be in defeat, under a mask in ye sleep.
Unsure what i mean i'm talkin bout a breathin machine.
Leave you stiffer then a manakin dummy.
Ok dummy?
Who really cares what you think.
Do this shit ASAP like T.I And you're the IT that will stink.
Chop you up like lunch meat, No one can find you now.
They're like what happened and how.

Haven't wrote in a minute honestly been doin my school work. leave some comments on this. hate if u want it dont matter anymore. Peace- SP-
You have never put enough pressure on yourself to succeed with writing. You don't get good by dropping once a year.

As much as I'd love to give you positive feedback, I can't do it.