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Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 10:35 pm
by Mass Effex
haha. It kept my hooked in, I like the word choice, and I could really feel the emotion from your words. I like how you ended it too.
Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 11:20 pm
by ÐÛÇ£»
Lmao @ you being on some o.j shit
Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 11:29 pm
by Miilz
Lmfao
It Caught My Eye, This Wasn't Bad. You Kept The Story Line Good The Flow Was Nice. i Found it Entertaining, Also i Get Where You're Coming From When You Talking About These Hoes. Anyways This Was A Tight Drop. This The Thing, i Usually Get Bored Reading Topical Text, But You Seem To Always Catch My Attention In Each Drop.
Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 11:47 pm
by Haz
Deff.. a Emotional Piece.. Reminds ME OF Some EMinem Type Shit..
RHymes was There.. But The Actual Feelings N Emotion Could Be Felt..
The Realness is There , Unlike Half The Scripts people Post Where it Could Be
"Sad" but 'No Emotion Comes off...
I Respect How u Can Air ya SHit Out.. Writings Theraputic...
For How Short This Was And The Topic's Consistency i'd Give it a 8/10
Posted: Thu Oct 23, 2008 5:41 am
by Kurse
That's dat shit kid, haha...I know how all that goes mayne. Granted I dislike the government's "push to shove" tactics worse when it comes to protecting the BM's...but I know where ur at wit it when it comes to the emotion and the train-of-thought in this matter.
Very nice.
Posted: Thu Oct 23, 2008 8:43 am
by precise
lmaoooooo
"if i could go back id be sure to beat and rape you"
sincerely yours im glad u know i hate u
^^^^damn that endin was hilarious dude, i liked the style, short n to the point, werent really any impressive rhymes but it did flowe better because of it. good shit
also, comin from the dude that wrote "10 reasons why OJ is my hero" makes the shit even better hahaha
Posted: Thu Oct 23, 2008 11:45 am
by Haz
Yo.
Feed My New Drop U Bastard
LOL
Posted: Thu Oct 23, 2008 11:47 am
by Glamtrash
hahaha I like it. Anything fueled by hate and passion makes for a good piece. Killer endin too.
9/10
Posted: Sat Oct 25, 2008 8:07 pm
by |.R.SON.aLL.|
Lmao This Shit Was Koo ..
Loved Tha Opener ..
Shit Was Fresh to Me ..
I Tend to Love Weird Shit ..
Posted: Mon Oct 27, 2008 4:22 am
by Cee4
damn this was on some real shit. like ya needed to vent. the whole thing hit hard. the closer was obviously the highlight. shock tactics grab the readers attention and you expressed your emotion well. 8/10
Posted: Mon Oct 27, 2008 4:53 am
by Def-init
Nice Hate. I can relate to this drop big time.
Nice closer lol
"You Called Tha Police i Was Kicked Outta My Own Crib
i Wish i Hadda Life Ta Live i Was Kicked Outta My Own Kids "
Deep n dope bro. My fav line in your drop.
Posted: Mon Oct 27, 2008 4:02 pm
by Arvincible
this piece was real nice fam...i loved the tone u set and the syntax couldnt have been better--crisp and simple to the point.
9/10 man for a key this was lovely lol
Posted: Wed Oct 29, 2008 7:29 am
by HKX
nice drop nigga gots emotion in it and everythin dat goes wit it wanna see more of dis shit when u drop sumthin else keep droppin 1
Posted: Thu Nov 06, 2008 11:36 am
by precise
5 reasons why TOYH is my hero:
1- he wrote 10 reasons why OJ is his hero (in fightclub)
2- afterwards, he wrote a scripture called "decieving bitch" lmaooooo
3- hes comfortable enuff with his sexuality to use pink text.. (he doesnt care if we all know hes gay)
4- juice-zilla, nuff said hahaha
5- ive always hated heros (ThaOneYouHate)
hahahaha
Posted: Sat Nov 08, 2008 12:32 am
by Mac
Dope Ish, This Just Goes To Prove Once Again That If You Flow About Real Shit It Comes Out More Natural. This Verse Was Fresh, The Opener Was Bananas An The Ending was Raw. It Sucks It Was So Short Though, You Outta "remix" It and Make It Longer, I'd Like To See More...
This Was Definately A Elevated Verse From You From What I've Read In The Past.
Stay At It Man.