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This one is for you precise. Enjoy.


Life started in a circle with a pentagram in the middle
Moms face was fertilized as she gave birth to me in a brothel.
Now I live in a castle alongside the herbal
Cause I was crowned the 'grammatical cannibal'
Can't shed tears! So a stand I make!
Shiver...when sounds of bag pipes skim the landscape
I walk alone, the desperado in my flow preaching a cipher
Expanding circular from my point of origin.
The beacon pinpoint's death's ripples from my location
Thoughts that architect the foundation for the next generation
I anchor my cravings in rhymes cause I suck at painting
So abundant they shatter my surroundings and prevent me....
From pissing on a burning orphan unless you paid me
A classic epidemic of Schizophrenic Conversations turned angry
The subject...raping a diabetic with Christmas cane candy
I'm hooded-evil, so evil even Hades can't stand the sight of me
I'm lethal when I besiege you like Julius Caesar
A simple life? Fantasy...The only thing I learned in elementary
Was to extensively end a fight in fatality
Like smashing mother fuckers into the ground and Callin it gravity
I thought it was a good idea to drive feeling tipsy
Now the visual is crimson holes flowing from my hockey jersey
The chronic condition of drinking has never been told so graphically
The black market buys and sells human organs
Old-fashioned fascism and anatomic Capitalism
I'm just trying to "Let a nigga know" like Saigon
That letting by-gones be by-gones won't stop the crimes
Cause when the slugs fly and the rivers dry
Your soul is the first thing going bye!!

A Symphony of Destruction erupts
When the abrupt proclamation promised is the prophecy of police brutality
I amplified my appearance and caused jealousy
When I Realized I could victimize on a rhyme scheme.
Melt down scythes into triple beams
My style becomes an opiate derivative
Every time I see a thug acting massively sensitive
Everywhere I go I sense it. On the contrary...
Or maybe it's contemporary cause I feel it too...
Who says they can be me? Cause apples don't fall from my tree
Masquerading in illusion, I'm malevolent about male violence
Grotesque injustice festers in a cave containing anguish
The situation is aggravation when the allegation's and speculation
Of segregation through god's eternal court of litigation
Leads to trepidation for all of creation!
My legions tire of the charade so here's our movement
Tear down the establishment and its media puppet
Run the gauntlet, fuck the stigma, suffer the trauma
Battle the hydra; drag it from the shoreline into the magma
The light burns, blinds and taunts me
Until the door opens from the turned key
And in creeps the darkness that allows me to see...
I rise up; I see my dirt stained knees.
The light did this to me, but the shadows free me,
The light no longer binds me, I eclipse the landscape,
I pilot the flagship leading warships filled with conscripts
Right to the gates and educate god on the true meaning on purgatory
That's the first story, the genesis in the black book containing hymns of sodomy


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man this was fire brought the vocab the flow i couldnt get as easy but this was dope i was really feelin n lovin this stuff

When the abrupt proclamation promised is the prophecy of police brutality
I amplified my appearance and caused jealousy
When I Realized I could victimize on a rhyme scheme.
Melt down scythes into triple beams
My style becomes an opiate derivative
Every time I see a thug acting massively sensitive

^this was the upmost of the whole thing for me it had heart i'm not sayin the rest didnt just this stuck out to me man keep bringin ya flow keep'em comin

Thx bro. This one really wasnt all about flow. It was more for vocab than anything.

i noticecd it wasnt about the flow..with that said I Think this would fit better in the distilled concepts ..it was tite though a Good Read ..Strong & Dirrect Vocab through out..at time even vivid in imagery ..7/10

I was thinking about dropping it in the distilled concepts section
But was torn between both sections because there is a fair amount of flow in it
and that is what defines the difference between a poem and a rhyme to me. The way in which it flows. With this one I couldn't choose. It seemed right in the middle between each. When I write I just sit down and freestyle it and I dont second guess the emotion I put into my work. So I just desided to drop it and allow the readers to give there input.

...CONCEPT WAS COOL...FLOW WASN'T THERE..BUT I SEE THAT WASN'T THE POINT...I WOULD'VE STEPPED UP A NOTCH ON THE VOCAB...BUST OUT THE THESAURUS FOR THE NEXT ONE...CUZ THIS ONE WAS MORE POEMY...LOL IF THAT IS EVEN A WORD.

haha thanks for the dedication bro


The subject...raping a diabetic with Christmas cane candy

^^lol damn man

The black market buys and sells human organs
Old-fashioned fascism and anatomic Capitalism

^^^^niice

When the abrupt proclamation promised is the prophecy of police brutality

^^ i like the alliteration uve got in this line



n good call postin it here, u get alot more feed in scriptures than in distilled concepts, the rhymescheme for the most part was kinda subliminal hangin in the middle of lines but it was still there, loved the crazy vocab as usual, this was a kickass drop dude, loved the concepts, keep postin

dope.

u have an original style which is good. u think 'outside the box'
u brought the imagery and the vocab

could of stepped it up with the multis to make it flow a bit better but it was more a poetic style so multis are not really that big a deal

good shit