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I thought you were an ice cold killer. Fire got you shaking.
The temperature is burning. Drop it like it's hot.
My heat is what you're scared of. You're afraid to go on.
Stop acting like your hard. I bet you melt like a retard.
What shift is the body guard on?
You need to give to receive a gift. Think about others
I'll introduce a different word. You wonder what's next.
Present them with something to ponder. I got you stoned in the head.
Rock the bells during Christmas. Santa and the elves are playing.
I'm a dog staying in the zone.
We all deal with problems on our own. Be strong and carry on.
Clear for my mighty advance. I just put everything in park.
The cards are on the table your move. This is the last supper.
Jesus walked barefooted. He struggled with the cross on his back.
I make it pitch black in the city states.
Get ready for the party mate. There's going to be cake and ice cream.
Join the assembly to get a piece. Give me all the scraps.
Sunday afternoon is the gathering. Make sure you got everything on the list.
I got Timberland shoes and sock on. The clean look got you checking.
I'm wrecking your brain for the better.
There's cold weather outside wear a sweater. It will match my Levis jeans.
My intention wasn't to bring you down. Stay flying in the clouds.
Light it up to warm my insides. The moon steals shine from the sun.
Hands to you please don't disobey. The rules are set in stone.
I represent and unknown label.
It's about time to set up the table. Gather the spoon and forks.
I will satisfy and nourish your hunger. I'll stop all your cravings.
I'm a keep feeding you until the alarm. There's a warning in the guide.
Orders of pizza come around noon. Please stay for lunch.
Try getting up because you're down from my rabbit punch.

Speechless wrote:I thought you were an ice cold killer. Fire got you shaking.
The temperature is burning. Drop it like it's hot.
My heat is what you're scared of. You're afraid to go on.
Stop acting like your hard. I bet you melt like a retard.
What shift is the body guard on?
You need to give to receive a gift. Think about others
I'll introduce a different word. You wonder what's next.
Present them with something to ponder. I got you stoned in the head.
Rock the bells during Christmas. Santa and the elves are playing.
I'm a dog staying in the zone.
We all deal with problems on our own. Be strong and carry on.
Clear for my mighty advance. I just put everything in park.
The cards are on the table your move. This is the last supper.
Jesus walked barefooted. He struggled with the cross on his back.
I make it pitch black in the city states.
Get ready for the party mate. There's going to be cake and ice cream.
Join the assembly to get a piece. Give me all the scraps.
Sunday afternoon is the gathering. Make sure you got everything on the list.
I got Timberland shoes and sock on. The clean look got you checking.
I'm wrecking your brain for the better.
There's cold weather outside wear a sweater. It will match my Levis jeans.
My intention wasn't to bring you down. Stay flying in the clouds.
Light it up to warm my insides. The moon steals shine from the sun.
Hands to you please don't disobey. The rules are set in stone.
I represent and unknown label.
It's about time to set up the table. Gather the spoon and forks.
I will satisfy and nourish your hunger. I'll stop all your cravings.
I'm a keep feeding you until the alarm. There's a warning in the guide.
Orders of pizza come around noon. Please stay for lunch.
Try getting up because you're down from my rabbit punch.

After reading this drop I feel that its approach would be better in the distilled concepts area. The rhyme scheme seemed a bit off. and more suited to a poem.

"Stop acting like your hard. I bet you melt like a retard.
What shift is the body guard on?"

Made me chuckle. It was pretty funny yo!

If you dont mind me askin. How old are you? The ideas and metaphors in this seem kinda 'new' in years.

???WTF...IT SOUNDS LIKE YOUR JUST IN A LETHARGIC TRANCE TALKIN BOUT NUTHIN..LOLZ...SORRY THATS HOW I INTERPRETED...FIND A CONCEPT..STICK WITH IT..RHYME...AND MAKE IT FLOW IF YOU ARE TRYING TO SPIT...IF ITS A POEM..YOU GOTTA WORK ON THE IMAGERY A LITTLE BIT..THROW IN SOME METTAS AT LEAST.

Good deep shit but I agree with Prit-E and Def-Init, it's kinda like a poem, but if you made this shit rhyme, It would be a good track.