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Alpha Bill
Hkx
Kurse

You Check in To Bitch.

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Check..
And Dere Was No Deadline Kid.. Calm ya Self..
i Ain Like You Havin All Da Time in Da World

Ain No Kinda Competition Jokers Still in Practice-Funny..
Da Shots ima Send At-Dis-Dummie'll "Hailey" BURY MILLZ Lyk Actriss-Money

He-Like-a-Mouse,More a Sandcastle Cause Cee-Wiped-Um-Out ( No Showa..)
Ima get Into a "Scuffle-Pleaze" Millz got Soft Bars Like a Cuple-Keys...

Ya Corspe-Flip,Of Course-Lip get u Torchd-Quick.."Beat Now" not Storch-Prick
Down ya Throat You Force-Dick..And u 'Ride in Vipa' Lyk Buyin a SPORTS WHIP!

Tell Dis Fake-Thug for god Sakes-Plug His Mouth..Wut He's Droppin
is "Date Drugs"..He Couldn't "Beat Hardcore" Like He Only MAKE LOVE...(HKX)
(Ya corny shit makes niggaz snore)

i Can't "Bare this Fag" Dis Cub.Gay Fuc Wud Dis Scrub-Say..His Snub-Spray?
Yet i Put "Millz Unda Ground" Like Financin a SUBWAY!

Call This Weed-&-Blunts Like "Desparate Prostitutes" Haz Freein-Sucks
Stop Feining-Nuts,Kid ya Rappin-Lame Kid ya Gettin More "Ha Z" Then Half-Ya-Name
(Freein Sucks= Free In Sucks, Ha Z = Hazard)

Stop Acting-Flames i'ma Vet-Ya-Trash Like Thrift Store Owners ill Accept-His-Trash
i'ma Wreck-Ya-Fast & Collectin-Two-Wins Like "21 Alphabets" U Battle Vets-n-U-End
(U=You)

im The Best-Who-Sinned 1st Murkin-Kid U Couldnt Steal "A Ten Chin" Fakin Kurses-Pic
Ima Hurt-Ya-Ribs ur a Fairy-Prick Beating Me? U "Miss Taken" Like a Married-Chick
(A Ten Chin = Attention, Miss Taken = Mistaken)

Kid i Barely-Spit & Already Shook-Ya-Set im Winnin Hands Down Lyk Done Push-Up-Test
Nigga Look-Im-Vet This Dumb Scums-Adoring Im on Top Of Haz Like Drug-Importing

kid ya Block-Cock Hoe-Stop Posin ya So-Hot ya Flow Ock Like hawaii only A Low Ha
Dont-Drop Dis pakistan-blows-well ull get killed "in stunt" like jackie-chan-n-hotels
(A Low Ha = Alowha, In Stunt =Instant)








Yo Haz, Didnt i Say Wait Until My internet is back?
U Dumb Bitch Stop Tryna Cheat ya Ways To Ya Wins
And Tryna Sway Votes in Ya Verses You Do That in All
You're Battles Give SHout Outs TO Other Users i Can
Pass Links ..

Anyways
No Votes From Kurse, & Hkx

Yeah, But Lets Leave Beef A Side Voters And Please Dont
Dick Ride

Punches Miilz
Flow Tie
Metaphor Haz
Entertainment Miilz
Wordplay Miilz
Multis Miilz

v/ Miilz, Somebody battle me Next

hi...

Punches - miilz
Flow - haz
Metaphor - haz
Entertainment -haz
Wordplay -tie
Multis- miilz

haz

Punches - Millz
Flow - Haz
Metaphor - Haz
Entertainment - Haz
Wordplay - Tie
Multis - Millz.

VOTE: Hazard.

Double FL Break Down The Bars

He Probably asked Cus Them Two Chicks Rarely Vote On Battles ..
i ain`t Seen Them Vote in Some Months ..

i`m Doin` a Complete Breakdown ..
Niggas Bitch all U Want i`ll Rip Both Of U ..

Hazard

Ain No Kinda Competition Jokers Still in Practice-Funny..
Da Shots ima Send At-Dis-Dummie'll "Hailey" BURY MILLZ Lyk Actriss-Money

^^.. This Was an aiight Opener, it Wasn`t Hard-Hittin .. No a Good Way to Open Up a Verse, Multies Were Koo` .. Tha Punch Was Decent .. i Juss Think U Shoulda Opened Up Better ..

He-Like-a-Mouse,More a Sandcastle Cause Cee-Wiped-Um-Out ( No Showa..)
Ima get Into a "Scuffle-Pleaze" Millz got Soft Bars Like a Cuple-Keys...

^^.. i Liked Tha First Line, But Tha Second Line Was Like WTF? .. Wasn`t Feelin` That Second Line, Took away From Tha Whole Bar ..

Ya Corspe-Flip,Of Course-Lip get u Torchd-Quick.."Beat Now" not Storch-Prick
Down ya Throat You Force-Dick..And u 'Ride in Vipa' Lyk Buyin a SPORTS WHIP!

^^.. This Was Crammed to Me, Like That Beat Now Shit, U Coulda Worded it Better So it Could Make More Sense .. But i Like Tha Closin` Line it Was So What Hittin .. Props .. Multies Was Nice ..

Tell Dis Fake-Thug for god Sakes-Plug His Mouth..Wut He's Droppin
is "Date Drugs"..He Couldn't "Beat Hardcore" Like He Only MAKE LOVE...(HKX)
(Ya corny shit makes niggaz snore)

^^.. That Was Nice To Me, Coulda Got More indepth But Overall Nice Bar ..

i Can't "Bare this Fag" Dis Cub.Gay Fuc Wud Dis Scrub-Say..His Snub-Spray?
Yet i Put "Millz Unda Ground" Like Financin a SUBWAY!

^^ .. Good Way to Close, it Was Nice Nameplay, i Felt it ..

Overall - U Needa Start Puttin More Force & Powerful Punches in Tha Beginnin Of ya Verse ..
Thas Where ya Reader Starts, Keeps Their attention ..
Nice Multies, Were Tha Best Part Of Tha Verse to Me ..
Punches Were Nice, & Some Were Mad Weak ..

Call This Weed-&-Blunts Like "Desparate Prostitutes" Haz Freein-Sucks
Stop Feining-Nuts,Kid ya Rappin-Lame Kid ya Gettin More "Ha Z" Then Half-Ya-Name
(Freein Sucks= Free In Sucks, Ha Z = Hazard)

^^.. Came Out Swingin, Koo Concepted .. U Should`ve Worded it Better to Have More Sting But i Got What U Were Sayin .. Good Opener ..

Stop Acting-Flames i'ma Vet-Ya-Trash Like Thrift Store Owners ill Accept-His-Trash
i'ma Wreck-Ya-Fast & Collectin-Two-Wins Like "21 Alphabets" U Battle Vets-n-U-End
(U=You)

^^ .. Wasn`t Feelin` This Bar .. Like it Was Not Hittin ..

im The Best-Who-Sinned 1st Murkin-Kid U Couldnt Steal "A Ten Chin" Fakin Kurses-Pic
Ima Hurt-Ya-Ribs ur a Fairy-Prick Beating Me? U "Miss Taken" Like a Married-Chick
(A Ten Chin = Attention, Miss Taken = Mistaken)

^^ ..Lmfao! Wow, That Bar Was Nice .. Whole Bar Was Sick .. Back to Back Hits, Mos Deffo Hittin` ..

Kid i Barely-Spit & Already Shook-Ya-Set im Winnin Hands Down Lyk Done Push-Up-Test
Nigga Look-Im-Vet This Dumb Scums-Adoring Im on Top Of Haz Like Drug-Importing

^^ ..That Push Up Punch Was Nice, New Concept Props .. i Haven`t Seen That Nameplay Used On Haz Before, But That Was Good Too .. Coulda Had Better Multies, Cus it Was Lackin in This Bar Major ..

kid ya Block-Cock Hoe-Stop Posin ya So-Hot ya Flow Ock Like hawaii only A Low Ha
Dont-Drop Dis pakistan-blows-well ull get killed "in stunt" like jackie-chan-n-hotels
(A Low Ha = Alowha, In Stunt =Instant)


^^ ..Good Closer, i Hate Tha First Line`s Multies, They Were Juss Wack to Me .. But Everythin` Else Was Pretty Good ..

Overall - Mos Deffo Had a Good Start, But U Gotta Follow Up Wit Better Punches are Too ..
Make Sure to Keep Tha Reader`s interest ..
Multies Were Lackin` a Lil in This Battle ..
Step That Up ..
Word ya Punches & Wordplay Better ..


Opener - Miilz [ Dude Came Out Swingin, it Juss Seemed Like Haz Was Warmin Up a Bit .. Didn`t Really Have a Hard Hittin` Punch .. But Enough to Top Haz`s 1st Bar ]
Punches - Miilz [ Had Better Concepts & Set-Ups .. Came Off More Hard Hittin` imo, & He Was More Effective Wit His Hits ]
Flow - Haz [ Much Cleaner & Neater Structure, U Can Mos Deffo Feel Tha Flow Of Haz`s Verse, Miilz Flow Was Koo`, But it Was More Choppy Than Haz`s ]
Metaphor - Miilz [ Same Reason as Tha Punches Cat, He Was More Creative Than Haz .. Kinda Outshined Him a Lil ]
Entertainment - Both [ Both Had Their Moments Where i Was Like, That Was Nice .. Then They Had Those Moments Like Wtf Mah Nigga? .. Lol ]
Wordplay - Both [They Both Needed Help On Wordin` They Concepts Man .. They Was Lackin` On This Cat ..]
Multis - Haz [ Multies Were alot More Smoother Than Miilz` .. His Shit Was Like Yuck Sometimes, & i Wasn`t Feelin` That ]
Nameplay - Miilz [ Way Better Nameplay, Had New Concepts to Tha Battle .. & Was Hard-Hittin` .. Haz Shoulda Brought New Shit to Tha Table .. Even Tho That Closer Was Crazy to Me .. Lol]
Closer - Both [i Loved Both Tha Closers, They Went Out Wit a Bang ]

V/ Miilz ..

Slightly Better Verse ..

2-2..

Hazards Verse


Ain No Kinda Competition Jokers Still in Practice-Funny..
Da Shots ima Send At-Dis-Dummie'll "Hailey" BURY MILLZ Lyk Actriss-Money

^ the nameplay is the reason this was a little effective. it wasnt bad though
u defiantly put skill in that nameplay it was tight but u should of made the
opening more effective.

He-Like-a-Mouse,More a Sandcastle Cause Cee-Wiped-Um-Out ( No Showa..)
Ima get Into a "Scuffle-Pleaze" Millz got Soft Bars Like a Cuple-Keys...

^ this was kinda weak, not whack but not sick eigther.

Ya Corspe-Flip,Of Course-Lip get u Torchd-Quick.."Beat Now" not Storch-Prick
Down ya Throat You Force-Dick..And u 'Ride in Vipa' Lyk Buyin a SPORTS WHIP!

^ The closing was real dope, the multies were jammed together if u get it.
wasnt a bad bar though but u needa work on ya point more in the first part.

Tell Dis Fake-Thug for god Sakes-Plug His Mouth..Wut He's Droppin
is "Date Drugs"..He Couldn't "Beat Hardcore" Like He Only MAKE LOVE...(HKX)
(Ya corny shit makes niggaz snore)

^ ya 2nd dopest line dog, u murdered that line and u put some multies in
it that should of been worded better. but in beginnin i felt u was forcin
ya multies.

i Can't "Bare this Fag" Dis Cub.Gay Fuc Wud Dis Scrub-Say..His Snub-Spray?
Yet i Put "Millz Unda Ground" Like Financin a SUBWAY!

^ this was another tight bar u did u killed the closer.



Miilz Verse


Call This Weed-&-Blunts Like "Desparate Prostitutes" Haz Freein-Sucks
Stop Feining-Nuts,Kid ya Rappin-Lame Kid ya Gettin More "Ha Z" Then Half-Ya-Name
(Freein Sucks= Free In Sucks, Ha Z = Hazard)

^^ this was tight how u put metaphor and nameplay in it. you got um in both lines
that freein suck line was hot and the second bar nice opener.


Stop Acting-Flames i'ma Vet-Ya-Trash Like Thrift Store Owners ill Accept-His-Trash
i'ma Wreck-Ya-Fast & Collectin-Two-Wins Like "21 Alphabets" U Battle Vets-n-U-End
(U=You)

^^ The 21 alphabets was a tight line, first one wasnt that hard hitting but it was
still good though, u even squeezed in wordplay which was a little simple but was good.

im The Best-Who-Sinned 1st Murkin-Kid U Couldnt Steal "A Ten Chin" Fakin Kurses-Pic
Ima Hurt-Ya-Ribs ur a Fairy-Prick Beating Me? U "Miss Taken" Like a Married-Chick
(A Ten Chin = Attention, Miss Taken = Mistaken)

^^ Dopest bar! that " a ten chin" was a fucking dope. It was very humerous how u were
clowning with the wordplay had me laughing. Second bar was sick to, these were the dopest bars that u
dropped in this verse.

Kid i Barely-Spit & Already Shook-Ya-Set im Winnin Hands Down Lyk Done Push-Up-Test
Nigga Look-Im-Vet This Dumb Scums-Adoring Im on Top Of Haz Like Drug-Importing

^^ lol that first line was fucking sick! second line was tight to but not as good as
the first line in my opinion but u managed to put skill in it.

kid ya Block-Cock Hoe-Stop Posin ya So-Hot ya Flow Ock Like hawaii only A Low Ha
Dont-Drop Dis pakistan-blows-well ull get killed "in stunt" like jackie-chan-n-hotels
(A Low Ha = Alowha, In Stunt =Instant)

^^ I dont like reading these type of multies but i get why u stuffed them in there.
The hawaii line was sick, and the second wordplay was ill to, i felt it alot dog.


Haz fav bars
Ya Corspe-Flip,Of Course-Lip get u Torchd-Quick.."Beat Now" not Storch-Prick
Down ya Throat You Force-Dick..And u 'Ride in Vipa' Lyk Buyin a SPORTS WHIP!

millz fav bars
im The Best-Who-Sinned 1st Murkin-Kid U Couldnt Steal "A Ten Chin" Fakin Kurses-Pic
Ima Hurt-Ya-Ribs ur a Fairy-Prick Beating Me? U "Miss Taken" Like a Married-Chick


Punches- Miilz ( More effective with it, had a humerous wordplay behind it, and much more creative)
Flow- Haz ( His structure was a little easier to read )
Metaphor- Miilz (He was just more of a hard hitter with it, but both had but millz had more damage)
Entertainment- Miilz (His verse was more creative, and humerous)
Wordplay- Miilz ( easily got it even though both was nice)
Multis- Miilz ( he had more and some of haz felt like they were forced, but felt miilz more)


Vote? Miilz, yall both were hot. haz was banging in spots, but millz got this, i wouldnt call it
a close one but it was tight both got my attention.

close battle, ill do a breakdown
both verses were nice so dont take any offense im just being critical

hazard:

Ain No Kinda Competition Jokers Still in Practice-Funny..
Da Shots ima Send At-Dis-Dummie'll "Hailey" BURY MILLZ Lyk Actriss-Money

^^^nice concept but didnt quite work for me, rhymes were nice

He-Like-a-Mouse,More a Sandcastle Cause Cee-Wiped-Um-Out ( No Showa..)
Ima get Into a "Scuffle-Pleaze" Millz got Soft Bars Like a Cuple-Keys...

^^^haha love the soft bars punch, and sandcastle was a nice personal
didnt continue the rhymescheme but its better than forcing

Ya Corspe-Flip,Of Course-Lip get u Torchd-Quick.."Beat Now" not Storch-Prick
Down ya Throat You Force-Dick..And u 'Ride in Vipa' Lyk Buyin a SPORTS WHIP!

rhymes were alright but for some reason seemed a little choppy, is vipa a person on the site? i dunno if i get the punch

Tell Dis Fake-Thug for god Sakes-Plug His Mouth..Wut He's Droppin
is "Date Drugs"..He Couldn't "Beat Hardcore" Like He Only MAKE LOVE...(HKX)
(Ya corny shit makes niggaz snore)

^^^lol another nice concept,

i Can't "Bare this Fag" Dis Cub.Gay Fuc Wud Dis Scrub-Say..His Snub-Spray?
Yet i Put "Millz Unda Ground" Like Financin a SUBWAY

^^^ this is a killer nameplay n it flowed nicely



miilz verse:


Call This Weed-&-Blunts Like "Desparate Prostitutes" Haz Freein-Sucks
Stop Feining-Nuts,Kid ya Rappin-Lame Kid ya Gettin More "Ha Z" Then Half-Ya-Name
(Freein Sucks= Free In Sucks, Ha Z = Hazard)

^^^pretty nice nameplay, was kinda choppy for flow, rhymes were cool

Stop Acting-Flames i'ma Vet-Ya-Trash Like Thrift Store Owners ill Accept-His-Trash
i'ma Wreck-Ya-Fast & Collectin-Two-Wins Like "21 Alphabets" U Battle Vets-n-U-End
(U=You)

^^^ not really feelin this bar, weaving the rhymeschemes together works sometimes but it came out a bit choppy here, also reusing trash n vets a few times, ah i donno

im The Best-Who-Sinned 1st Murkin-Kid U Couldnt Steal "A Ten Chin" Fakin Kurses-Pic
Ima Hurt-Ya-Ribs ur a Fairy-Prick Beating Me? U "Miss Taken" Like a Married-Chick
(A Ten Chin = Attention, Miss Taken = Mistaken)

^^^ this bar is hot, cheapshot at kurse but it was funny n original, misstaken is pretty clever too, first line flowed nicely, second line "fairy prick" kinda threw flow off but still nice bar overall

Kid i Barely-Spit & Already Shook-Ya-Set im Winnin Hands Down Lyk Done Push-Up-Test
Nigga Look-Im-Vet This Dumb Scums-Adoring Im on Top Of Haz Like Drug-Importing

^^^ive seen the "hands down" n "push ups" done a few times, didnt like the rhymescheme n flow too much i think cause of the grammer

kid ya Block-Cock Hoe-Stop Posin ya So-Hot ya Flow Ock Like hawaii only A Low Ha
Dont-Drop Dis pakistan-blows-well ull get killed "in stunt" like jackie-chan-n-hotels
(A Low Ha = Alowha, In Stunt =Instant)

^^^nice jackie chan line, a low ha was a nice concept dont think it worked too well tho, first line flowed, second line rhymes were a tad forced but they work




Punches- tie
Flow- haz
Metaphor- neither really had em,
Entertainment-haz
Wordplay-millz
Multis-tie

similies- tie


close battle, id have to say haz for the win but barely, both came correct tho

vote- haz

Really close battle here. both came decent. Haz got flow. both had punches that hit and some that didnt. Millz edged it with wordplay which kinda swayed entertainment his way since punchlines were tied . lol at "a ten chin".

Punches- Tie
Flow- Haz
Metaphor- Tie
Entertainment- Millz
Wordplay- Millz
Multis- Tie


Vote Millz

thread locked, records updated

according to the battle rules voting time is up

good battle