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Living Ungrateful Days With Razor Blades...Addicted Fiends And Nicotine Have Paved The Way...

[Verse 1]
Born In A Filthy Prison Mourned With Shitty Livin,
Family Was Torn By Tha Cities System..(How Do I Survive?)
Biological Mother Screams Out.. (I Feel Tha Power In Her Cry)
Going Skitz-O-Frantic So I Panic Spiraling Into Paranoia
A Side Of Me Seeming Mysterious Well Let Me Declare It For Ya...
Where Would A Nigga Be If Tha Rubba Didn't Bust?
Would I Be Another Non Existent Fucka In Tha Dust?
Honesty Ties Broken So Many Have Flushed My Trust..(Down Tha Drain)..
Fire Of Misery..(How Do I Douse Tha Pain..)
But I Can't Complain I've Obtained Knowledge From Tha Valley Of Tha Weak...
Escaped Wid My Life..So Sacrifices Will Be Made Time To Talley Up Da Sheep...


[Chorus]X2
Dam...Man I'm Tryna Feed My Fam So I'm On Every Corna...
No Matter How Righteous A Hood Nikka Look Tha Cops Steady On Ya..
I'm So Confused I Always Lose...But I Die With Great Honor..
Cuz I Spit Realness Take It How Ya Wanna...


[Verse 2]
Back On Tha Grind With My Immaculate Mind...
Learned Tha Tools Of Tha Trade,I'll Die 2Morrow So I Make Sure iL Use It Today
(My Father Was Abusive In Ways) ..Evil Is Splurgin...
I Can't Make It When Even Lucifer Prays...
Yall Pray For My Down Fall...Envious So You Turn Snake If Im Not Around Yall..
I'm Not My Normal Self..Mental Help Is Meant For Me...
My Posse Doesn't Rest In Peace...We Rep In Penetenturies...

Feed...Would Be Appreciated...

This Piece Was Decent Fam ..
i Excepted a lot More ..Cus Tha First Verse Was Good ..
I Thought U Was Finna Get in Depth With Tha Pain, Struggle Etc. ..
It Was a Quick Look, Not Really a Full Picture Type ...
But it Was Overall Better Than a lot Others ..
On a Lyrical Tip Multies Was Good, Flow Was On Point ..
I Liked How U Changed Up ya Flow ..
& Used Adlibs as Rhymin Skills Too ..
That Was Koo ..
So Props Fam

Thanks For Tha Feed Back...And Chea Just A Quick Glimpse...More Of A "Beta" Scripture...