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Re: A Fathers Choice.....

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OMG!!! this left me speechless, it was great one of the best things i have ever read wow!!! i almost broke down in tears....great job :)
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Re: A Fathers Choice.....

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Still the realest shit ive ever read on this site

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Really Really deep from the beging to the end really enjoyable.
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Re: A Fathers Choice.....

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WsICCWQo ... ure=relmfu

^ I spit this verse to this beat, and I had to double time my flow at a couple points to make it work, but it flows really well and the content is crazy emotional dude. I don't know what kind of feed you were expecting cause I'm sure you knew this was good, but I appreciate your talent. Keep it up.
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Re: A Fathers Choice.....

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DOOOOOPPPPEEE THANKS evo for linking this up

i have been enlightend lol

nah foreals though good read .. great read, took a lot of character to write this .. a lot of heart
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Re: A Fathers Choice.....

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Definitely feelin this. Good imagery and portrayal of emotion. Enjoyed the wording, multies and rhyme schemes you chose, although some were iffy in the rhyme department, but not so much that it hurt the piece. Def got some talent, fam. Keep writin.
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Re: A Fathers Choice.....

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wow, first off i could see the emotion in this well done, the multies were all solid, you followed the topic well and covered it well, nice metaphors, it flowed very well, over all nice drop, respect.
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Re: A Fathers Choice.....

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ok ok ok... I VOTE BEST PIECE of the MONTH, Maybe even YEAR. I dont think we have a section for that... BUT SHIT MAN. BUMP, BUMP BUMP
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Re: A Fathers Choice.....

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again... good look on the feed im glad yall liked it... and thanks Alvin I appreciate the recognition from ya... out of all of the pieces I have written this is def my favorite...
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